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10/8/2006 c1 23Unwritten Answers
i think it isn't bad, but it could do with a little improvement. the story runs at a rather fast pace, and i spotted a few grammatical errors which certain readers might not like very much. also, you might want to check the summary for one or two spelling errors too.

otherwise i think it's pretty fine, and could be quite an interesting story. good luck(:

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