for TORTURE CHAMBER10/18/2006 c1 
3blockedwriter
Umm, I acctualy have to agree with the last reviewer. This was not very scary. Discusting yes. I think in order to make this story better you need to have more "Torture", After all, its supposed to take place in a torture chamber. Also, you should end it differantly becasue if your eyes are removed, you can't see them staring up at you. Just a suggestion. :D
3blockedwriterUmm, I acctualy have to agree with the last reviewer. This was not very scary. Discusting yes. I think in order to make this story better you need to have more "Torture", After all, its supposed to take place in a torture chamber. Also, you should end it differantly becasue if your eyes are removed, you can't see them staring up at you. Just a suggestion. :D
10/11/2006 c1 8Spatter Artist
Hmm...I have to admit that wasn't very impressive. I read the other review, and I was wondering if we're both reading the same story.
My first point of criticism would be that this is very, very general. The other reviewer said that you had a great amount of detail, and that at the same time you left the reader guessing...this is quite contradictory. You need to put much more detail into your story; try adding descriptors of the room and more general background. :)
Secondly, I don't really see any horrifying elements. After reading both parts I'm not feeling a thing, just a bit of disappointment. It looks like you're trying too hard here...and for some reason, both of your stories include blowjobs. Remember, a story doesn't have to be gratuitous to be scary. ;)
8Spatter ArtistHmm...I have to admit that wasn't very impressive. I read the other review, and I was wondering if we're both reading the same story.
My first point of criticism would be that this is very, very general. The other reviewer said that you had a great amount of detail, and that at the same time you left the reader guessing...this is quite contradictory. You need to put much more detail into your story; try adding descriptors of the room and more general background. :)
Secondly, I don't really see any horrifying elements. After reading both parts I'm not feeling a thing, just a bit of disappointment. It looks like you're trying too hard here...and for some reason, both of your stories include blowjobs. Remember, a story doesn't have to be gratuitous to be scary. ;)
10/11/2006 c1 HORRORMOVIEDUDE97
wow that was disturbing.especially the first one.the story is very detailed and i like the way u leave the reader with a sense of wonder.ur story makes me think about what could happen to them next.nice job and very disturbing.
wow that was disturbing.especially the first one.the story is very detailed and i like the way u leave the reader with a sense of wonder.ur story makes me think about what could happen to them next.nice job and very disturbing.