for Heart Divided2/5/2007 c51 
1A. L. Saveley
Oh...this doesn't look good. I'm totally psyched to see what happens next. Things are starting to get really interesting. ^^
1A. L. SaveleyOh...this doesn't look good. I'm totally psyched to see what happens next. Things are starting to get really interesting. ^^
2/5/2007 c50 5Fahr
... ...eh? Goodness, I've been reading the past few chapters and forgetting to review...
Eh, but the whole 'Cyril understanding why a delegate wouldn't want people to know that they are meeting with the king's son' thing was kinda strange. Technically it would sort of make sense for a delegate to get to know the king's heirs because, Phile and Alber aside, Cyril /is/ still in line for the throne. A country's delegates would want to have some info on the immediate successors of the Keelite throne in case anything should happen to the king so that their own countries' leaders won't be in the dark.
Also, your characters seem to /know/ quite a bit, and sometimes it can makes things a little difficult for me to understand because they're all talking about what they /know/. That's fine and dandy, but every once and a while /I/ don't know what /they/ do and it can get frustrating. Never assume that readers know what characters know.
Anywho, it was both a relief and a slight disappointment that Cyril didn't get kidnapped or stuck like a pig. ... ...Argh. Cynical much?
So, good chapter again, wot. And still as entertaining as ever. :D
5Fahr... ...eh? Goodness, I've been reading the past few chapters and forgetting to review...
Eh, but the whole 'Cyril understanding why a delegate wouldn't want people to know that they are meeting with the king's son' thing was kinda strange. Technically it would sort of make sense for a delegate to get to know the king's heirs because, Phile and Alber aside, Cyril /is/ still in line for the throne. A country's delegates would want to have some info on the immediate successors of the Keelite throne in case anything should happen to the king so that their own countries' leaders won't be in the dark.
Also, your characters seem to /know/ quite a bit, and sometimes it can makes things a little difficult for me to understand because they're all talking about what they /know/. That's fine and dandy, but every once and a while /I/ don't know what /they/ do and it can get frustrating. Never assume that readers know what characters know.
Anywho, it was both a relief and a slight disappointment that Cyril didn't get kidnapped or stuck like a pig. ... ...Argh. Cynical much?
So, good chapter again, wot. And still as entertaining as ever. :D
2/5/2007 c50 Tuiki
Yay! I was right! Um..I'm just going to say great chapter (because no matter what chapter it, is it's always great) Please update!
Yay! I was right! Um..I'm just going to say great chapter (because no matter what chapter it, is it's always great) Please update!
2/5/2007 c50 2Stang65
VERY well written! I loved this chapter. More of the same is in order. The intrigue is intoxicating.
2Stang65VERY well written! I loved this chapter. More of the same is in order. The intrigue is intoxicating.
2/4/2007 c50 Alenor
heya, these are great chappies. i can't wait for more. i hope that zarna, karenna and rolen are genuine about their wish to change alliances otherwise it'll be bad! cya later ~ Alenor.
heya, these are great chappies. i can't wait for more. i hope that zarna, karenna and rolen are genuine about their wish to change alliances otherwise it'll be bad! cya later ~ Alenor.
2/4/2007 c50 1A. L. Saveley
What a great chapter...makes a lot of sense now. The ending was kinda sad, though. Makes me feel bad for Kera, really.
1A. L. SaveleyWhat a great chapter...makes a lot of sense now. The ending was kinda sad, though. Makes me feel bad for Kera, really.
2/3/2007 c49 Tuiki
Too many people crawl in that castle...I wonder if it was Rolen...or Kera or possibly someone who...won't well not kill him but...GAH...just update!
Awesome chapter.
Too many people crawl in that castle...I wonder if it was Rolen...or Kera or possibly someone who...won't well not kill him but...GAH...just update!
Awesome chapter.
2/3/2007 c49 A. L. Saveley
Oh wow...that ending was quite the cliffhanger. Best update soon before I die of anticipation! lol
Oh wow...that ending was quite the cliffhanger. Best update soon before I die of anticipation! lol
2/3/2007 c49 2Stang65
GREAT chapter! Who is this Rolen dude and who is he looking for? Also, a lot of sneaky people get into this palace. Totally can't wait until the next update!
2Stang65GREAT chapter! Who is this Rolen dude and who is he looking for? Also, a lot of sneaky people get into this palace. Totally can't wait until the next update!
2/3/2007 c49 3Black Temptation
lol, Kera certainly got them back! ^_^ But, omg, who was following Cyril? Update please! I have to know what happened!
Much Love,
~*Black Temptation*~
3Black Temptationlol, Kera certainly got them back! ^_^ But, omg, who was following Cyril? Update please! I have to know what happened!
Much Love,
~*Black Temptation*~
2/1/2007 c48 Tuiki
Wow Kera is evil...I'd kill her for that...
Continue please...I have nothing to do today...
Wow Kera is evil...I'd kill her for that...
Continue please...I have nothing to do today...
2/1/2007 c48 Black Temptation
Hahaha! Itching powder! rotfl.. That was well done, they should be more careful next time! lol
Much Love,
~*Black Temptation*~
Hahaha! Itching powder! rotfl.. That was well done, they should be more careful next time! lol
Much Love,
~*Black Temptation*~
2/1/2007 c48 2Stang65
HILARIOUS! I LOVED this chapter! How are they gonna top this joke - or worse, what will they plan for her birthday? Also curious to know who Roland is. Someone to compete with Cyril for Kera's affections?
2Stang65HILARIOUS! I LOVED this chapter! How are they gonna top this joke - or worse, what will they plan for her birthday? Also curious to know who Roland is. Someone to compete with Cyril for Kera's affections?
2/1/2007 c48 1A. L. Saveley
OMG that was SO funny! I really should learn not to take the time to read stories at lunch. Laughing hysterically like a lunatic does not sit well with my friends, I think...lol
-A
1A. L. SaveleyOMG that was SO funny! I really should learn not to take the time to read stories at lunch. Laughing hysterically like a lunatic does not sit well with my friends, I think...lol
-A
1/31/2007 c47 3Black Temptation
HAHAHA she got them good, I like that! hehehe... that was funny, I love it! Good chapter! Keep up the great work!
Much Love,
~*Black Temptation*~
3Black TemptationHAHAHA she got them good, I like that! hehehe... that was funny, I love it! Good chapter! Keep up the great work!
Much Love,
~*Black Temptation*~