for message in a bottle10/19/2010 c1 
4SilverChelle14
I have to say that the first thing that drew me to your page was the name...Burnt Bread. I love it! It's great!
But about the little message in a bottle. I always thought a message in a bottle was a really cool idea. I like yours. It begins casual, with the whole, "Guess I'm going fine." and delves deeper with the feelings of love, and then, "Waiting for a change of weather" seems a casual end as well but has so much more meaning.
Great job!
-GH
4SilverChelle14I have to say that the first thing that drew me to your page was the name...Burnt Bread. I love it! It's great!
But about the little message in a bottle. I always thought a message in a bottle was a really cool idea. I like yours. It begins casual, with the whole, "Guess I'm going fine." and delves deeper with the feelings of love, and then, "Waiting for a change of weather" seems a casual end as well but has so much more meaning.
Great job!
-GH
10/25/2006 c1 4Sakka-Fenikkusu
I completely understand people mistaking you for a poet. I have more poems than stories, too. I prefer to think of myself as a poetic writer.
"A million love songs lay useless on the desk because they never touch on the feelings that are weighing in my chest."
I feel so tempted to make fun of you for this. Consider yourself lucky that I'm not posting on all my forums, "Bread writes sappiness!" Okay, I wouldn't really do that. Or would I?
Nice job with this. I love everything you write. I worship everything you write. You make me really not want to eat any bread. Because, it feels like... cannibalism.
BREAD IS GOD
WORSHIP BREAD
Ok, so maybe that's going a little too far, considering that you reacted to me just calling you "awesome", but, really, you rock beyond belief.
Without Brains
Ms. Fenikkusu
4Sakka-FenikkusuI completely understand people mistaking you for a poet. I have more poems than stories, too. I prefer to think of myself as a poetic writer.
"A million love songs lay useless on the desk because they never touch on the feelings that are weighing in my chest."
I feel so tempted to make fun of you for this. Consider yourself lucky that I'm not posting on all my forums, "Bread writes sappiness!" Okay, I wouldn't really do that. Or would I?
Nice job with this. I love everything you write. I worship everything you write. You make me really not want to eat any bread. Because, it feels like... cannibalism.
BREAD IS GOD
WORSHIP BREAD
Ok, so maybe that's going a little too far, considering that you reacted to me just calling you "awesome", but, really, you rock beyond belief.
Without Brains
Ms. Fenikkusu
10/24/2006 c1 18Sevidian
Very, very, very good! I loved this. Keep writing, because you have got talent. This was definately the best poem I've ever read!
18SevidianVery, very, very good! I loved this. Keep writing, because you have got talent. This was definately the best poem I've ever read!
10/24/2006 c1 David Lovato
Wow... this was so good, it gave me chills.
Possibly the first thing I've read on Fictionpress to do so.
Amazing work, keep it up.
Wow... this was so good, it gave me chills.
Possibly the first thing I've read on Fictionpress to do so.
Amazing work, keep it up.
10/22/2006 c1 31Nurgette
This is quite a good piece; you have used some great phrases, such as "People are... time" and "Your whispers...veins", and the rhyming isn't too overpowering. It is in an interesting format; not quite poem and not quite prose/letter. I think more could have been said if it were slightly longer, but nevertheless, it is an interesting bit of writing.
31NurgetteThis is quite a good piece; you have used some great phrases, such as "People are... time" and "Your whispers...veins", and the rhyming isn't too overpowering. It is in an interesting format; not quite poem and not quite prose/letter. I think more could have been said if it were slightly longer, but nevertheless, it is an interesting bit of writing.
10/19/2006 c1 56felicia13
Way to have self-doubt. Don't delete poems ... it's sad. Poetry = fun. Even if you don't think so ...
Ok. This was pretty nice. It brings to mind a lot of things ... like a person standing amidst a crowd in fast-forward, so that they're standing there in normal time while everything moves past them. Also brings up the pool of blood next to the dead body holding the still-smoking gun.
So, it was pretty good and thought-provoking. Great work!
Felicia.
56felicia13Way to have self-doubt. Don't delete poems ... it's sad. Poetry = fun. Even if you don't think so ...
Ok. This was pretty nice. It brings to mind a lot of things ... like a person standing amidst a crowd in fast-forward, so that they're standing there in normal time while everything moves past them. Also brings up the pool of blood next to the dead body holding the still-smoking gun.
So, it was pretty good and thought-provoking. Great work!
Felicia.