for On the Bridge11/23/2001 c1 Marsisbrighttonight
I loved it. It was scary, very frightening. It goes to show you have to watch who you go out with or hang around. It wasn't deep in the way that most First persons are, but it was presently thourough and detailed and had a definate chill factor.
I loved it. It was scary, very frightening. It goes to show you have to watch who you go out with or hang around. It wasn't deep in the way that most First persons are, but it was presently thourough and detailed and had a definate chill factor.
10/8/2001 c1 
2clamchowder
Nicely written, but something seems to be wrong with the formatting of the top line. One thing confused me - is the guy called Randy or Adam? Keep it up!
2clamchowderNicely written, but something seems to be wrong with the formatting of the top line. One thing confused me - is the guy called Randy or Adam? Keep it up!
7/8/2001 c1 9thedorkygirl
That was great, simply marvelous. However, that jerk Randy didn't get the beat out of him like he diserved, IMHO. (In My Humble Opinion)
9thedorkygirlThat was great, simply marvelous. However, that jerk Randy didn't get the beat out of him like he diserved, IMHO. (In My Humble Opinion)
3/11/2001 c1 8The Alchemist
This is a really cool story. I think you've really shown how important trust is in any relationship and what happens when its broken. Randy is a really great stereotype and that really emphasises your theme. I think this story shows that sometimes the really tough guys are the real cowards sometimes and are just used to having everyone drop at their feet. Really well written. I loved it. Congratulations on a job well done.
8The AlchemistThis is a really cool story. I think you've really shown how important trust is in any relationship and what happens when its broken. Randy is a really great stereotype and that really emphasises your theme. I think this story shows that sometimes the really tough guys are the real cowards sometimes and are just used to having everyone drop at their feet. Really well written. I loved it. Congratulations on a job well done.