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1/31/2012 c1 60AppleCrumble
This is brilliant. Really loved it, its haunting, beautiful and quite sad. Great job!
3/16/2007 c1 19phantom-jedi
Very haunting in its simplicity. Good work.

phantom_jedi
3/6/2007 c1 8hagiasophia
beautiful, slightly off rythum, but still wonderful imagery
12/3/2006 c1 612simpleplan13
I love the ending.. great job
11/26/2006 c1 Galadh Niniel
So sad, and wonderfully expressed.
11/12/2006 c1 19Awen1923
Nicely done. Good use of imagery.
10/26/2006 c1 91High Sky
short and beautiful. i like poems that change technique mid poem. i would like to read the poem in its original format, out of curiosity.
10/25/2006 c1 168SeaVoi
very nice, i like the "stop"
10/23/2006 c1 132mizu no kokoro
pretty... yet sad. reminds me of the past...

keep writing
10/21/2006 c1 219S Noelle Long
this poem makes me ache. makes me want to understand the complete depth of the metaphors.

my only criticism is that i couldn't really feel the rhythm or flow of it. (but i'm attributing that to not supporting your format?)

also, as an FP tip, to get more readers- and subsequently more reviews- you should write more in your summaries. i usually use a favorite line from the poem, just a taste, to get them interested.

thank you for the review as well.
10/21/2006 c1 bipedalcooney
Beautiful imagry! I love how the word "stop" breaks the flow of the poem in the middle; it adds a wonderful impact to the piece. Great work, I like this a lot.
10/21/2006 c1 35Autumn Reflections
Wow.

Beautiful imagery and very well formatted (even though fictionpress couldn't take the original formatting, which is a shame.)

I like it xD

Keep writing

Autumn

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