for She Isn't10/24/2006 c1 
44S.C.R.E.A.M.I.N.G
Wow... thats all I can say. I loved the abstractness. It just sort of... flowed. Very, very good work.
44S.C.R.E.A.M.I.N.GWow... thats all I can say. I loved the abstractness. It just sort of... flowed. Very, very good work.
10/24/2006 c1 21Aella88
Nice work. I really liked the last part "You're wanting her to be yours, She isn't she isn't." However, I also liked other lines. Some of them just seemed to flow so perfectly. "Chasing phantoms" "You're going to crash blind, ready ready hit a wall"
21Aella88Nice work. I really liked the last part "You're wanting her to be yours, She isn't she isn't." However, I also liked other lines. Some of them just seemed to flow so perfectly. "Chasing phantoms" "You're going to crash blind, ready ready hit a wall"
10/24/2006 c1 14Darla Gray
I really am entranced by this piece. And yes, the ending stanza really does pull it all together. I love the abstract-ness of it. Truly a lovely poem. Keep up the excellent work! (:
14Darla GrayI really am entranced by this piece. And yes, the ending stanza really does pull it all together. I love the abstract-ness of it. Truly a lovely poem. Keep up the excellent work! (:
10/22/2006 c1 132mizu no kokoro
wow... haunting. i like how abstract this is, yet in the end it all makes sense
keep writing
132mizu no kokorowow... haunting. i like how abstract this is, yet in the end it all makes sense
keep writing