for Just Agian2/2/2007 c1 
21lordelfy
different...it seems dark but in a happy weird crooked way! lol i like it though!
21lordelfydifferent...it seems dark but in a happy weird crooked way! lol i like it though!
10/23/2006 c1 49Toxic.Industrial.Waste
Hm. I like the idea of the poem. It's a little rough around the edges, though.
Exm:
"Should I kill you and let you drown in your own blood,
Or should I kill you to drown for you in your blood."
the last line it a little hard to compherend at a 1st glance. Maybe somthing more like 'Or should I kill you and drown instead?" and you shouldnt have used a "." when you should have used a "?"
49Toxic.Industrial.WasteHm. I like the idea of the poem. It's a little rough around the edges, though.
Exm:
"Should I kill you and let you drown in your own blood,
Or should I kill you to drown for you in your blood."
the last line it a little hard to compherend at a 1st glance. Maybe somthing more like 'Or should I kill you and drown instead?" and you shouldnt have used a "." when you should have used a "?"