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11/14/2006 c1 35Daffodil Elizabeth
This is a lovely hiaku. I must agree that the tense does sound a bit off at times, but the words are so descriptive that it doesn't detract that much from the poem itself. If I were you, I'd just fix that and the poem would be great!
11/12/2006 c1 19Awen1923
Nicely written...although the word tenses are a little off in places. Still, I really liked this poem.
11/8/2006 c1 463All Alone With Her Thoughts
Excellent job.

Thanks for the review!

~Rowan~
10/29/2006 c1 118Thenardier
This is lovely. Has a tinge of sadness, yet peace in it. The tense seems a bit weird though.
10/26/2006 c1 322Basara
saddening...
10/25/2006 c1 The Haiku Police
... What?
10/24/2006 c1 bipedalcooney
Vivid, and the mood is well written here. I like this.
10/24/2006 c1 17sunday night sky
I love this, lovely simply imagery... however, I think the tenses need looking at - 'she now plundered down under/rested peacefully' it makes more sense (to me) if it was 'she now plunders down under/ resting peacefully'. In my opinion.

But anyway, I like it :D

Keep writing!

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