for When a Rose Blooms in December10/31/2006 c6 
6givelifeyurall
its surprisingly normal paced i thought that 6 chapters would be too fast for dante to start having feelings for norah but i like the flow of it, keep on writing and i hope dante gets norah
6givelifeyurallits surprisingly normal paced i thought that 6 chapters would be too fast for dante to start having feelings for norah but i like the flow of it, keep on writing and i hope dante gets norah
10/31/2006 c6 xonea
well, i think the pace of the story is normal...not too fast and not too slow...=)
Braden is so sweett!
and Dante is falling for Norah!
this should be fun!
lol.
well, update soon!
well, i think the pace of the story is normal...not too fast and not too slow...=)
Braden is so sweett!
and Dante is falling for Norah!
this should be fun!
lol.
well, update soon!
10/31/2006 c6 rina
i think that this story is going at a good pace. now update soon!
i think that this story is going at a good pace. now update soon!
10/31/2006 c6 8writerwithoutacause
ok i liked this chapter alot. i liked the length, the overall content and how your characters were clearly defined in their personalty, i know melding and changing them can be tempting.
one thing though, it was a little fast paced, i mean maybe you have a plan, and it needs to be, but i would slow it down a bit. not even the bradin/norah interaction(although starting it soo soon does imply it won't last) but dante already discovering his feelings was too soon for me. i would try to be more subtle about it.
anyways great work, and i really hope you don't hate me for the criticisms, i just like to leave helpful well rounded reviews, but i do love this story.
update soon!
8writerwithoutacauseok i liked this chapter alot. i liked the length, the overall content and how your characters were clearly defined in their personalty, i know melding and changing them can be tempting.
one thing though, it was a little fast paced, i mean maybe you have a plan, and it needs to be, but i would slow it down a bit. not even the bradin/norah interaction(although starting it soo soon does imply it won't last) but dante already discovering his feelings was too soon for me. i would try to be more subtle about it.
anyways great work, and i really hope you don't hate me for the criticisms, i just like to leave helpful well rounded reviews, but i do love this story.
update soon!
10/31/2006 c6 sanzo-reload
Yaay.. Braden makes his move. Frankly, I think it's a little fast-pacesd. Maybe u should slow down a bit. But that's just my opinion.. Ukey, keep writing. Luv ya!
Yaay.. Braden makes his move. Frankly, I think it's a little fast-pacesd. Maybe u should slow down a bit. But that's just my opinion.. Ukey, keep writing. Luv ya!
10/30/2006 c5 8writerwithoutacause
ok i like this sotry, its extremaly cute.
although the plot is cliched i really can't talk and who doesn't love a cliche? its funny and you pull off the male point of view very well. i especially enjoyed the family/ steroetypes problems, i like it when stories are well rounded.
things to work on...(because that's why we leave reviews
i was a little confused about dante's drunk part, he seemed kind of feminine which was odd to me.
i also found claire's little speech too norah-esque although i liked that you didn't make her a stupid ditz.
lastly and im just being nitpicky (because sometimes the wierdest things bother me) the quiz, i know most quizes are like that, one letter for one thing, but her to keep picking c kind of bothered me, i found it to become an obvious way to show she's romantic.
anyways sorry about the long review and i hope i haven' offeneded you. i just like to leave helpful reviews instead of omgz update now. but yeah omgz update now.
laugh,out,loud.
8writerwithoutacauseok i like this sotry, its extremaly cute.
although the plot is cliched i really can't talk and who doesn't love a cliche? its funny and you pull off the male point of view very well. i especially enjoyed the family/ steroetypes problems, i like it when stories are well rounded.
things to work on...(because that's why we leave reviews
i was a little confused about dante's drunk part, he seemed kind of feminine which was odd to me.
i also found claire's little speech too norah-esque although i liked that you didn't make her a stupid ditz.
lastly and im just being nitpicky (because sometimes the wierdest things bother me) the quiz, i know most quizes are like that, one letter for one thing, but her to keep picking c kind of bothered me, i found it to become an obvious way to show she's romantic.
anyways sorry about the long review and i hope i haven' offeneded you. i just like to leave helpful reviews instead of omgz update now. but yeah omgz update now.
laugh,out,loud.
10/30/2006 c5 1Gwyn Baranof
This is hilarious. I like it. Give me a little more and I will help you out.
1Gwyn BaranofThis is hilarious. I like it. Give me a little more and I will help you out.
10/29/2006 c5 orangecandyy
Ah...I really wanted to read about what Dante would think. Great chapter, although I kinda had a hard time concentrating. (I just don't like reading about background too much) Can't wait for the next chapter! Please update soon!
Ah...I really wanted to read about what Dante would think. Great chapter, although I kinda had a hard time concentrating. (I just don't like reading about background too much) Can't wait for the next chapter! Please update soon!
10/29/2006 c5 sanzo-reload
Love your story.. Can't wait to see when Braden to make his nmove on Norah.. Umm.. I wonder...
Okay, keep writing!
Love your story.. Can't wait to see when Braden to make his nmove on Norah.. Umm.. I wonder...
Okay, keep writing!
10/29/2006 c5 2EeeNAce
hmm... i really do like this story. I just tend to give some constructive criticism everywhere so I hope you don't feel offended. The only complaint I have about this chapter is Claire's introduction. The way she comes out and says all of that is sort of unnatural. If someone that looked like that came up to me and said that, I'd seriously be like "Wtf" because once a person's image is developped, it doesn't take just a few sentences from the person to change the image. You know? Well good chapter =) I'm looking forward to the next.
2EeeNAcehmm... i really do like this story. I just tend to give some constructive criticism everywhere so I hope you don't feel offended. The only complaint I have about this chapter is Claire's introduction. The way she comes out and says all of that is sort of unnatural. If someone that looked like that came up to me and said that, I'd seriously be like "Wtf" because once a person's image is developped, it doesn't take just a few sentences from the person to change the image. You know? Well good chapter =) I'm looking forward to the next.
10/29/2006 c4 EeeNAce
its going pretty smoothly, but i think braden's "i like norah" thing was really sudden... spontaneous. And Dante seems really... emo. =\... Well, it still has my interest so do continue!
its going pretty smoothly, but i think braden's "i like norah" thing was really sudden... spontaneous. And Dante seems really... emo. =\... Well, it still has my interest so do continue!
10/29/2006 c5 Your Passion
I am Glad you like the nickname!lol, So she ran into Braden and outside her door is Dante. Now he is going to make fun of her!
I loved this Ch. and please update very soon!
(I'm addicted)
~JAM
I am Glad you like the nickname!lol, So she ran into Braden and outside her door is Dante. Now he is going to make fun of her!
I loved this Ch. and please update very soon!
(I'm addicted)
~JAM