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5/20/2007 c1 13herpius derpius7
There was some nice imagery in this. I like how you compared the thorn to the soldier protecting the flower, and how you said "Though the thorn may fail and flower be plucked from the soil... / Raindrops are forever and seeds grow again."

That was a nice way to end the poem.

I was a bit confused at the beginning when you said:

"Little silver raindrops / memories worth two life times."

That line just didn't click for me. At first I thought you meant two life times in the sense that rain can kill but also bring forth new life, and then I thought you meant two lives as in the thorn and the flower, but I was still confused. Of course, I'm still kind of groggy from sleep at the moment and so my mind may still be clouded from that.

Overall this was really nice. (:
10/26/2006 c1 bipedalcooney
Wow, I love the imgry and the metaphors in this. Beautifully written. The last line ended the poem wonderfully. Well done, keep writing.

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