for to be a child12/12/2006 c1 
612simpleplan13
well i am still youth so I cant realte to all of this but I can relate to some of it and I love how you describe us... very nice poem
612simpleplan13well i am still youth so I cant realte to all of this but I can relate to some of it and I love how you describe us... very nice poem
11/4/2006 c1 94smile persephone
Personally, I didn't like the style; but, it seems necessary for the message you are conveying. I do love the imagery and raw power of the forth stanza. You are a gifted writer. (Speaking of which, how did your publishing quest go?)
94smile persephonePersonally, I didn't like the style; but, it seems necessary for the message you are conveying. I do love the imagery and raw power of the forth stanza. You are a gifted writer. (Speaking of which, how did your publishing quest go?)
10/30/2006 c1 hey maria
The fourth verse is just dazzling, I want to etch it on a banner and hang it over the world. It's that eternal message that everyone keeps hammering over our heads and no one seems to hear it: life's short, this is only the beginning. It's an old idea, but so important, and you make it very original in this poem. Nice job.
The fourth verse is just dazzling, I want to etch it on a banner and hang it over the world. It's that eternal message that everyone keeps hammering over our heads and no one seems to hear it: life's short, this is only the beginning. It's an old idea, but so important, and you make it very original in this poem. Nice job.
10/29/2006 c1 63lackluster
it's strange how people always say youth was that 'golden age' even when it was probably the worst time of their lives. we tend to forget the bad so easily just to have that perfect image in our heads. i'm not old enough to look back and sigh, either.
"playing lover to loveless": perfect.
63lacklusterit's strange how people always say youth was that 'golden age' even when it was probably the worst time of their lives. we tend to forget the bad so easily just to have that perfect image in our heads. i'm not old enough to look back and sigh, either.
"playing lover to loveless": perfect.
10/29/2006 c1 90poetic abortion
Jesus, I love the format. Just the style of the poem was enough for me to go whee and, seriously, it was just so RIGHT.
Wai~! Yes; just so good.
Oh; there are so many lines that own my heart, and there are A LOT.
"this: was all make-believe" - Loved that; just pretty and perfect and NICE. My heart just OWNED that line and, uh, all the other one's but, still! That line was totally amazing.
~* Noelle
90poetic abortionJesus, I love the format. Just the style of the poem was enough for me to go whee and, seriously, it was just so RIGHT.
Wai~! Yes; just so good.
Oh; there are so many lines that own my heart, and there are A LOT.
"this: was all make-believe" - Loved that; just pretty and perfect and NICE. My heart just OWNED that line and, uh, all the other one's but, still! That line was totally amazing.
~* Noelle