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10/30/2006 c1 Captain Lucky
Need I say again how amazing you are? Very well then, I shall: You are AMAZING! I've already commented on this piece, so I 'll just shut up now... =)
10/30/2006 c1 5Qlmmb2086
To the above reviewer:

In both instances, the sentence is grammatically correct and do not require commas. Some English teachers will say there should be a comma before "and" in a list, but a comma there is neither required nor discouraged.
10/29/2006 c1 5Kaggr
Wonderful so far! A few things that just sort of stood out...(Because what good author really likes a review without constructive critisism?)

"...view of the conflict and the pristine air of..."

I would be inclined to put a comma after conflict.

"Occasionally the sounds of battle would be pushed upward by the wind and the air would fill with the sound of horses, men and the clash of swords."

Okay, so there, I'd think a comma after occasionally, wind, and I believe there's supposed to be one after men.

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