for Tug of War2/20/2007 c1 susan
Such raw honesty in the first passage. You penned what everyone was afraid to utter.
Such raw honesty in the first passage. You penned what everyone was afraid to utter.
12/3/2006 c1 
104FunkyFlower
this is pretty good, but to be honest, i prefer some of ur other work than this. like the overall feel though, keep writing,
~mez~
104FunkyFlowerthis is pretty good, but to be honest, i prefer some of ur other work than this. like the overall feel though, keep writing,
~mez~
10/30/2006 c1 82Twilit Exaggerance
A much stronger poem than your latest one, I must say. Excellent contrast, and the poem flows much better.
'It rebukes the sinister voices coaxing me into comas.'
'I will humbly listen, reposed in his palm.'
Some very nice use of language here, especially reposed. Good!
82Twilit ExaggeranceA much stronger poem than your latest one, I must say. Excellent contrast, and the poem flows much better.
'It rebukes the sinister voices coaxing me into comas.'
'I will humbly listen, reposed in his palm.'
Some very nice use of language here, especially reposed. Good!