for Lies Are Simply Stories11/3/2006 c1 Christybell
Aw, you really captured a litte kid here.
It was so swet.
"mummy is supposed to be always"
Aw, you really captured a litte kid here.
It was so swet.
"mummy is supposed to be always"
11/3/2006 c1 
89rira-chan
i liked this one very much. i liked the repitition i found in it ^_^ great job!
P.S i thought your reveiw on my story made sense! ^_^
~rira-chan
89rira-chani liked this one very much. i liked the repitition i found in it ^_^ great job!
P.S i thought your reveiw on my story made sense! ^_^
~rira-chan
11/2/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
I like the stream of consciousness of this, and how it wraps around itself in a way. The train of thought works well to get the point across. Well written.
879Moondog DozierI like the stream of consciousness of this, and how it wraps around itself in a way. The train of thought works well to get the point across. Well written.
11/2/2006 c1 50In the Rye
the idea is good, and i'm not sure is you meant to sound so absurdly immature but you did. the whole "mummy makes things right" is good, just make it more mature. the logic is a little too disjointed though.
50In the Ryethe idea is good, and i'm not sure is you meant to sound so absurdly immature but you did. the whole "mummy makes things right" is good, just make it more mature. the logic is a little too disjointed though.