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11/3/2006 c1 85Reborn As I
the last line stings like a pin through the heart. the rest of the poem seems to be a build up for that last line. i like it.
11/3/2006 c1 17sixPAC
Great poem, really well written...i kinda get a fed up feeling from it? I also really like the questioning in there as well.

Nice work.
11/3/2006 c1 18SummerSun325
This is cool, you use good um... I dunno... um adjectives? Shoot, ok, this makes sense in my head. What am I trying to say... um... I LIKE THE WORDS YOU USE, THEIR BIG. It sounds like the Stone Sour song. I like how you put the questions in the middle, it makes it more um lively? IT SOUNDS COOL WHEN I READ IT. Gah, I'm trying to be all you know, review-y but I'm tired, and lopy, and it's just coming out retarded. The only part I don't understand is the last line. So close to what? But ... I don't really need to understand it, it's still neat. Oh wait. I get it now that I re read it. Wow, I'm just making myself sound like an idiot so I'm gonna go. Happy review.

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