for Misconception REWRITE6/17/2007 c9 
6Ginne
I completely understood it all from b4, you didn't even need the explanation at the beginning, it was great!
6GinneI completely understood it all from b4, you didn't even need the explanation at the beginning, it was great!
6/17/2007 c9 2Elfish Suicide
when u talk to someone in the game, do u talk by speaking or thinking it? Same with fighting, do u move or do u think the moves? srry i'm a little slow, despite the fact my IQ's 115
2Elfish Suicidewhen u talk to someone in the game, do u talk by speaking or thinking it? Same with fighting, do u move or do u think the moves? srry i'm a little slow, despite the fact my IQ's 115
6/16/2007 c9 6ObliviousLady
It's great. I understand the game concept pretty well. Your description was good.
Do update soon!
6ObliviousLadyIt's great. I understand the game concept pretty well. Your description was good.
Do update soon!
6/16/2007 c9 16Hyphonated
I can tell you now that if I was writing this it would never make sense. I really like this story, the characters actually sound real, and the virtual gaming thing is just really Cool!
I like the fact that the girl is strong and knows how to fight, it reminds me of me.
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16HyphonatedI can tell you now that if I was writing this it would never make sense. I really like this story, the characters actually sound real, and the virtual gaming thing is just really Cool!
I like the fact that the girl is strong and knows how to fight, it reminds me of me.
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6/16/2007 c9 2into the black
You ended the chapter awkwardly...but it was funny. Where did you get the idea for VRBG?
2into the blackYou ended the chapter awkwardly...but it was funny. Where did you get the idea for VRBG?
6/16/2007 c9 5Apiavva
Your fine...you do really well with the alternate reality...game world thing...i like the idea...kinda like the matrix...well a lot like the matrix...but really cool
5ApiavvaYour fine...you do really well with the alternate reality...game world thing...i like the idea...kinda like the matrix...well a lot like the matrix...but really cool
6/16/2007 c9 3The Sleep Of Reason
U did good explaining the story and showing the differences between each place but I suggest that to make it easier for others to differentiate you should make the line where you go switching from place to place to sepereate the sections... well I love ur story so yea... hope that helped
3The Sleep Of ReasonU did good explaining the story and showing the differences between each place but I suggest that to make it easier for others to differentiate you should make the line where you go switching from place to place to sepereate the sections... well I love ur story so yea... hope that helped
6/16/2007 c9 10MzKit10
Okay, i love the story and yes i get the game so please update. Very soon. yes, subtle aren't i. Poor girl, so many males, how annoying. And living with them geh. Talk about lack of privacy. But i guess that's a good thing, not the privacy thing, but the living with thing. I don't think girls would be so accepting of her col oddness. Anyway, brilliant story and updat soon
10MzKit10Okay, i love the story and yes i get the game so please update. Very soon. yes, subtle aren't i. Poor girl, so many males, how annoying. And living with them geh. Talk about lack of privacy. But i guess that's a good thing, not the privacy thing, but the living with thing. I don't think girls would be so accepting of her col oddness. Anyway, brilliant story and updat soon
6/16/2007 c9 Murphy's Lawyer
Okay, yes, I do understand, so I see /no/ reason for you stopping so soon! It's all very well-written, and the bit about Christian removing his headmic so Alex/Trinity wouldn't hear him laughing was a good way of reminding us that the players in the game only hear the people wearing the headmics.
And Alex's comment was HILARIOUS, by the way! Update soon,
LL
Okay, yes, I do understand, so I see /no/ reason for you stopping so soon! It's all very well-written, and the bit about Christian removing his headmic so Alex/Trinity wouldn't hear him laughing was a good way of reminding us that the players in the game only hear the people wearing the headmics.
And Alex's comment was HILARIOUS, by the way! Update soon,
LL
6/16/2007 c7 Miken
Ah! I'm so glad you decided to come back and continue the story! And wow - why do there have to be so many assholes in this world that like to attack girls...
Ah! I'm so glad you decided to come back and continue the story! And wow - why do there have to be so many assholes in this world that like to attack girls...