for Misconception REWRITE8/15/2007 c8 Cindy
Sorry, this story has potential to be good, with alot of editing...but I don't see that happening.
Sorry, this story has potential to be good, with alot of editing...but I don't see that happening.
8/14/2007 c16 xx.paradise-inspired.xx
This is an amazing story you have here. You have great writing skills. Don't give up, and please update soon! =]
This is an amazing story you have here. You have great writing skills. Don't give up, and please update soon! =]
8/13/2007 c17 
3Kyrina
wow this is a really good story and i cant wait for the next chappy, i love the VRBG game which i would SO love to play and yeah, its good!
3Kyrinawow this is a really good story and i cant wait for the next chappy, i love the VRBG game which i would SO love to play and yeah, its good!
8/13/2007 c17 people.are.strange
I started reading this story yesterday and its really good. How you came up with VRBG is beyond me, sounds so effing killer. Anywho can't wait for more of the story.
I started reading this story yesterday and its really good. How you came up with VRBG is beyond me, sounds so effing killer. Anywho can't wait for more of the story.
8/13/2007 c17 3JGoddess
aw...i was waiting for a chapter to read...xD It's really good...I m still thinking abt that warning chris gave alexis abt not going in the vrbg alone... or something like that... ehe...the guys in this story are really awesome...i hope something good is gonna happen...Jerrod seems like a guy that knows alot but altho he's protective and all that, it seems to fit his character .. xD i love the story ...don't let me wait that long...i haven't review the other chapters and not sure i should submit a review for 17 but i was devasted ...no chapter to read =[ ...WAITING for more =]
3JGoddessaw...i was waiting for a chapter to read...xD It's really good...I m still thinking abt that warning chris gave alexis abt not going in the vrbg alone... or something like that... ehe...the guys in this story are really awesome...i hope something good is gonna happen...Jerrod seems like a guy that knows alot but altho he's protective and all that, it seems to fit his character .. xD i love the story ...don't let me wait that long...i haven't review the other chapters and not sure i should submit a review for 17 but i was devasted ...no chapter to read =[ ...WAITING for more =]
8/13/2007 c17 1free2love92
i really like your story. its well written, cant wait for you to post more!
1free2love92i really like your story. its well written, cant wait for you to post more!
8/12/2007 c17 dkfkjbfbef
I love this story! And I love the VRBG game, it reminds me of a manga I have lying around.
Good luck on the next chapter, I'll certainly read it!
I love this story! And I love the VRBG game, it reminds me of a manga I have lying around.
Good luck on the next chapter, I'll certainly read it!
8/12/2007 c2 19Serom Kim
Uh, just so you know, this arrangement would never be possible in real life, so already it's not being realistic. I'll tell you why. If colleges really do put two students of opposite genders in the same rooms, they would switch them immediately. They could get sued otherwise.
What would I know about this, you may ask. I'm going to college this fall and I went there for a five-day orientation. Attendees were given a dorm and a roommate. The administration office made a mistake with my gender, and they put me in with a guy, who arrived later so he didn't know until I told him. They moved the guy to another room because I had gotten there first, and I hadn't even complained yet.
Besides this one fact, annoying me to no end, it's not bad. Your grammar is exceptional in comparison to other writers and story doesn't seem cliche to me. It's good, but I just wish you would've found a way around the problem I talked about earlier.
19Serom KimUh, just so you know, this arrangement would never be possible in real life, so already it's not being realistic. I'll tell you why. If colleges really do put two students of opposite genders in the same rooms, they would switch them immediately. They could get sued otherwise.
What would I know about this, you may ask. I'm going to college this fall and I went there for a five-day orientation. Attendees were given a dorm and a roommate. The administration office made a mistake with my gender, and they put me in with a guy, who arrived later so he didn't know until I told him. They moved the guy to another room because I had gotten there first, and I hadn't even complained yet.
Besides this one fact, annoying me to no end, it's not bad. Your grammar is exceptional in comparison to other writers and story doesn't seem cliche to me. It's good, but I just wish you would've found a way around the problem I talked about earlier.
7/16/2007 c16 1victim of reality88
I really like this so far. Im kinda worried bout Lurak, I dont want him to turn out bad. Anyways PLEASE UPDATE ASAP!
1victim of reality88I really like this so far. Im kinda worried bout Lurak, I dont want him to turn out bad. Anyways PLEASE UPDATE ASAP!
7/9/2007 c16 9Lady Wolfine
Hey, I really like this story. I love the VRBG (or an assortment of those letters-I'm tired), and think it is a different take on an old story. That's good. One thing I am not sure about-in the game, is it two seperate colleges that play, or just two seperate dorms? I think it's two different dorms, but I'm not quite sure... anyway. I think Lurak's okay, but I don't really know. Jerrod could know what he is talking about, as characters like him tend to do. And I love Kori.
9Lady WolfineHey, I really like this story. I love the VRBG (or an assortment of those letters-I'm tired), and think it is a different take on an old story. That's good. One thing I am not sure about-in the game, is it two seperate colleges that play, or just two seperate dorms? I think it's two different dorms, but I'm not quite sure... anyway. I think Lurak's okay, but I don't really know. Jerrod could know what he is talking about, as characters like him tend to do. And I love Kori.
7/4/2007 c16 19Olivine
This chapter came out great. I tried giving you a bit of advice before I read it, but it doesn't look like you needed anything I said, ha ha. I liked how at the end you kept Christian in character and everything, with the whole "yes! I mean, well, no, but..." thing. You know what I mean? Great job on this chapter. Can't wait for the next one.
Olivine.
19OlivineThis chapter came out great. I tried giving you a bit of advice before I read it, but it doesn't look like you needed anything I said, ha ha. I liked how at the end you kept Christian in character and everything, with the whole "yes! I mean, well, no, but..." thing. You know what I mean? Great job on this chapter. Can't wait for the next one.
Olivine.