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1812/5/2006 c63 Mooooo
Love this one!
Love this one!
12/5/2006 c70 Mooooo
I definitely think you cheated on this one! I read about 5 or so so far. These are pretty cool, but you really could have come up with something better for 67%... It actually quite interesting... alas...
farewell
I definitely think you cheated on this one! I read about 5 or so so far. These are pretty cool, but you really could have come up with something better for 67%... It actually quite interesting... alas...
farewell
12/5/2006 c15 anonymous
i don't think that it's quite as good as some of your other poems, but it's still really great. i really like how you can imagine what's going on in the poem, it helps me to connect. not bad o_O (sorry if i stole your smiley)
i don't think that it's quite as good as some of your other poems, but it's still really great. i really like how you can imagine what's going on in the poem, it helps me to connect. not bad o_O (sorry if i stole your smiley)
12/5/2006 c32 anonymous
nice. i really love the imagery. your poems always tend to be short, but in just a few words you manage to convey ideas and feelings that are actually really deep. congrats
nice. i really love the imagery. your poems always tend to be short, but in just a few words you manage to convey ideas and feelings that are actually really deep. congrats
12/5/2006 c43 anonymous
it's a good poem, probably because everyone ca relate to it. also, i like how you started with the action, instead of with the reflection, that made the poem easier to understand and less confusing to me than some of your other poems.
it's a good poem, probably because everyone ca relate to it. also, i like how you started with the action, instead of with the reflection, that made the poem easier to understand and less confusing to me than some of your other poems.
12/5/2006 c99 anonymous
it's both really descriptive and really vague, at the same time. you paint a picture of colors, but you don't give anything solid for the reader to rely on, which i think is a really cool effect. i can't wait to read more!
it's both really descriptive and really vague, at the same time. you paint a picture of colors, but you don't give anything solid for the reader to rely on, which i think is a really cool effect. i can't wait to read more!
12/5/2006 c7 Cricket
I liked 'break away,' with its narrative style and the almost metaphoric use of the car window. The lines seem to flow as well, so good work!
I liked 'break away,' with its narrative style and the almost metaphoric use of the car window. The lines seem to flow as well, so good work!
12/3/2006 c32 crazy dog events
For some reason I really like the line "In those days, I loved to let you whisper to me."
The repetition works here. It isn't overwhelming or annoying, which tends to happen a lot with overzealous fp poetry.
For some reason I really like the line "In those days, I loved to let you whisper to me."
The repetition works here. It isn't overwhelming or annoying, which tends to happen a lot with overzealous fp poetry.
12/3/2006 c31 crazy dog events
It's not badly written; It just didn't have any impact. Maybe flesh it out a bit?
You must be saying shaking your head and grumbling about my countless reviews by now. "Oh man, are you ever gonna say anything nice?" I really do think some of your stuff is great, and obviously I think it's incredible how you keep churning out these poems. I hope the concrit doesn't outweigh everything.
It's not badly written; It just didn't have any impact. Maybe flesh it out a bit?
You must be saying shaking your head and grumbling about my countless reviews by now. "Oh man, are you ever gonna say anything nice?" I really do think some of your stuff is great, and obviously I think it's incredible how you keep churning out these poems. I hope the concrit doesn't outweigh everything.
12/3/2006 c30 crazy dog events
Far too melodramatic for my tastes, but I can't deny that I've taken a stab at the crying in the rain/shower theme before, too. Moment of weakness.
Far too melodramatic for my tastes, but I can't deny that I've taken a stab at the crying in the rain/shower theme before, too. Moment of weakness.
12/3/2006 c40 bipedalcooney
Very interesting and unique, I really like this one. Amazing work, keep it up. This is an awesome collection.
Very interesting and unique, I really like this one. Amazing work, keep it up. This is an awesome collection.
12/3/2006 c23 bipedalcooney
Beautiful imagry, your writing here is full of life. Great work and keep writing.
Beautiful imagry, your writing here is full of life. Great work and keep writing.
12/3/2006 c18 bipedalcooney
This is a really creative piece, I love this. Awesome job and keep writing.
This is a really creative piece, I love this. Awesome job and keep writing.
11/27/2006 c29 crazy dog events
This would be so, so wonderful if it weren't for the gratuitous use of the & symbol.
This would be so, so wonderful if it weren't for the gratuitous use of the & symbol.