for Faithful Friend11/11/2006 c1 sylvia's syndrome
Here’s some of the constructive criticism you asked for…
I like freestyle and modern writing; it’s mostly what I write. So I’m all for poetic license and creativity when it comes to using italics, bold, and unorthodox punctuation. However, I don’t think your use of bold and italics really did anything for this piece. It isn’t so overdone that is takes away from the poem, but I don’t think it’s really adding anything either. Also, I think this poem would be improved if you used more punctuation, such as question marks after the first two lines and periods at the end of thoughts. In some cases, leaving out punctuation can really enhance the feeling of a poem, but I feel that in this case, it just makes everything run together into a jumble of words.
Here’s some of the constructive criticism you asked for…
I like freestyle and modern writing; it’s mostly what I write. So I’m all for poetic license and creativity when it comes to using italics, bold, and unorthodox punctuation. However, I don’t think your use of bold and italics really did anything for this piece. It isn’t so overdone that is takes away from the poem, but I don’t think it’s really adding anything either. Also, I think this poem would be improved if you used more punctuation, such as question marks after the first two lines and periods at the end of thoughts. In some cases, leaving out punctuation can really enhance the feeling of a poem, but I feel that in this case, it just makes everything run together into a jumble of words.