for What Do You Want From Me11/13/2006 c1 
463All Alone With Her Thoughts
Take out the line about the gum on your shoe. It just doesn't fit. I know it's refering to another poem, but i would either take those lines out or compind the two poems into one poem. That would be actaully pretty intresting. I recomend that.
~Rowan~
463All Alone With Her ThoughtsTake out the line about the gum on your shoe. It just doesn't fit. I know it's refering to another poem, but i would either take those lines out or compind the two poems into one poem. That would be actaully pretty intresting. I recomend that.
~Rowan~