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11/15/2006 c1 9Aluminum Tinkerbell

Kay, so, paragraphs. Please. It's great and all, but that wall of text scares me.

Right-o. Now to review. How mysterious! I wish it wasn't finished. Well, on second thought, it's good the way it is, too. Short-short stories rock as well.

Anyway, I like this! Thank god your character didn't pull a superhero stunt and get away like I was expecting. Characters keep doing those now a days.

"I tried to swallow the feeling but it would not go away." There should be a comma before the word 'but'. Commas before conjunctions. Most of the time. Grammer is so confusing, aye?

In conclusion- Great job, add paragraphs, please...

And, pretty please with sugar on top! continue some of your older stories, like 'Hand of the Shadow: Shandow' and 'The Dark Side of the Moon'.

'Symbols of the Forgotten' hasn't been updated since april. That's depressing. Give your older works some love.

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