for Craven Love3/18/2007 c2 super happy nuclear girl
I like how you described his high, it was pretty nice. Soft and buzzing sort :) And I like the contrast between the Kaiden and the dirty street whore Mev. Nice :) Its good.
I like how you described his high, it was pretty nice. Soft and buzzing sort :) And I like the contrast between the Kaiden and the dirty street whore Mev. Nice :) Its good.
3/18/2007 c1 super happy nuclear girl
Poor Mev :( The bj bit made me feel sick. But im glad you made it all saliva and stuff to make it grim. It'd have been rather shite making a sex-for-drugs bit of boff all poetic and eloquent :D or maybe Im just sick like that.
But, your writing is clear and neat, so it was easy to read and sort of added to the whole coldness to it. Street stories are so interesting :)
nice job.
Poor Mev :( The bj bit made me feel sick. But im glad you made it all saliva and stuff to make it grim. It'd have been rather shite making a sex-for-drugs bit of boff all poetic and eloquent :D or maybe Im just sick like that.
But, your writing is clear and neat, so it was easy to read and sort of added to the whole coldness to it. Street stories are so interesting :)
nice job.
3/9/2007 c2 
39Finwe
Heya! First off, thanks for reviewing my poem. :) I like your story here, it's definitely got potential. I noticed a few grammatical errors, but nothing major. Something you might want to think about, though, is somehow separating Kaiden's viewpoint from Mev's. Otherwise it gets a tad confusing. At any rate, keep up the great work. Looking forward to more!
-Finwe =^.^=
39FinweHeya! First off, thanks for reviewing my poem. :) I like your story here, it's definitely got potential. I noticed a few grammatical errors, but nothing major. Something you might want to think about, though, is somehow separating Kaiden's viewpoint from Mev's. Otherwise it gets a tad confusing. At any rate, keep up the great work. Looking forward to more!
-Finwe =^.^=
2/21/2007 c2 16Kiyoko Usagi
whoot drugs! I didn't know the Vikings had a special name for Thursday. Now I'll most likely go running around saying Thorsday and people will stare at me and call me stupid.
I'm pretty sure you aren't doing this on purpose but the suspence of getting to know the characters better is actually building up a lot. Haha.
16Kiyoko Usagiwhoot drugs! I didn't know the Vikings had a special name for Thursday. Now I'll most likely go running around saying Thorsday and people will stare at me and call me stupid.
I'm pretty sure you aren't doing this on purpose but the suspence of getting to know the characters better is actually building up a lot. Haha.
2/16/2007 c2 Orangeena
Such a great beginning. Maverick (love the name) is quite likeable. I just want to take him home and feed him or something. I can't wait for him and Kaiden to meet again!
Again, awesome story. Keep it up! :D
Such a great beginning. Maverick (love the name) is quite likeable. I just want to take him home and feed him or something. I can't wait for him and Kaiden to meet again!
Again, awesome story. Keep it up! :D
1/29/2007 c1 Kiyoko Usagi
aww
i feel bad for him. but he should go to school and get a better job! although male prostitutes in stories area always fun
: )
aww
i feel bad for him. but he should go to school and get a better job! although male prostitutes in stories area always fun
: )
12/1/2006 c1 5MysticMaJix
I think the story is pretty good so far Ive only just begun my writing. And still learning. Sorry about the confusion of the poem thing. Ur right it should've been listed under poetry. But I was rushing b/c the bell for skool was about to ring.So I just quickly posted it up.
5MysticMaJixI think the story is pretty good so far Ive only just begun my writing. And still learning. Sorry about the confusion of the poem thing. Ur right it should've been listed under poetry. But I was rushing b/c the bell for skool was about to ring.So I just quickly posted it up.