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1/26/2007 c1 8Rozovian G
Sounds aggressive. Sounds familiar. Sounds a bit perverse, the first couple of lines.

It's pretty much what happens on my bus ride to school, tho I tend to fall asleep on the bus and kind'a lose track of time a little nowadays.

It has a feel, and that's good enough for me. I don't udnerstand poetry, but if I sense a feel, it's good enough for me.
12/16/2006 c1 5RedHairedWriter
Very strong. I often feel, that music couses us emotions that don't belong to us. They definatly let us excape our own lifes, But I feel that isn't what you where saying? The "suck it, suck it" threw me off, I understand it in general, but I don't really.

P.S. I am ill, so it could be that.
12/7/2006 c1 16RubyXSerpent
Wow, intense indeed! I like it, and has a good (Yet somewhat deeper) meaning.

Ha, I should show this to my ipod-obsessed friends.
11/26/2006 c1 9Aluminum Tinkerbell
Vivid and intense. Those are my words for this poem. Vivid, intense, creative, eloquent... All good things. =)

However, the way you spelled playing (Play’n) seemed to break the flow up a bit. I'm not sure why you spelled it awkwardly, to tell you the truth.

-Marie
11/16/2006 c1 bipedalcooney
Very well written and vivid. The last few lines are brilliant. I like this a lot, definatley keep writing.

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