for Justified Homicide11/29/2006 c6 Emilyne Willowar
Guess who was too lazy to long in? Anyway...
Wow, I like pink, but not THAT much! I feel so bad for Aryan!
Guess who was too lazy to long in? Anyway...
Wow, I like pink, but not THAT much! I feel so bad for Aryan!
11/27/2006 c5 Counting Petals
My main issue with this was all of the spelling errors, but those are easy to fix. The whole scene in the car made me smile. It reminded me of going on trips with my family.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
My main issue with this was all of the spelling errors, but those are easy to fix. The whole scene in the car made me smile. It reminded me of going on trips with my family.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
11/27/2006 c5 
7xoxstorii-gurrlxox
Awee man. Lol. Update soon! I want some action to come. hehe.
XxTaylorXx
7xoxstorii-gurrlxoxAwee man. Lol. Update soon! I want some action to come. hehe.
XxTaylorXx
11/27/2006 c4 xoxstorii-gurrlxox
This is a cool chap. 0o. Finally we get to go to the field. Haha.
XxTaylorXx
This is a cool chap. 0o. Finally we get to go to the field. Haha.
XxTaylorXx
11/27/2006 c3 xoxstorii-gurrlxox
Me like this chapter. Well Kinda..lol..wasn't really anything goin on. But its cool none-the-less.
XxTaylorXx
Me like this chapter. Well Kinda..lol..wasn't really anything goin on. But its cool none-the-less.
XxTaylorXx
11/26/2006 c5 Flutterby
I like the story so far. However, your A/N's at the end could be...different. It gets rather boring to see the same thing after every chapter. Keep writing! It's great!
I like the story so far. However, your A/N's at the end could be...different. It gets rather boring to see the same thing after every chapter. Keep writing! It's great!
11/18/2006 c2 Counting Petals
I can tell that Aryan and I are going to get along just fine. I always love the really spirited characters. I really liked it, but the whole "going grey" and "going bald" thing really stuck out and bothered me...I thing "greaying" and "balding" would sound a lot better and less clunky there.
I can tell that Aryan and I are going to get along just fine. I always love the really spirited characters. I really liked it, but the whole "going grey" and "going bald" thing really stuck out and bothered me...I thing "greaying" and "balding" would sound a lot better and less clunky there.
11/17/2006 c1 Counting Petals
You might want to look at this again, there were a lot of sentences that made no sense at all. But I like the idea, with the journal and everything. Can't wait to see what happens next!
You might want to look at this again, there were a lot of sentences that made no sense at all. But I like the idea, with the journal and everything. Can't wait to see what happens next!