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11/19/2006 c1 59Frore
This is so cool (double meaning, le gasp)! In contrast to the previous reviewer, my favorite line is:

"And I turned until turning was all that I knew

And the snow lay in piles like scars

So I fell on my back in ambiguous blue

And I watched all the spinning of stars"

The emphasis of "and" for some reason really worked well there. Write more!
11/19/2006 c1 144chaos called creation
the phrasing of the ending seemed kind of weak

but the rest was lovely.

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