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12/9/2006 c1 871no.peace.los.angeles
Very nice piece. I do like the reflecting nature of this, so appropriate title for the poem. The first part of this, with the descriptions of the man-made decay, as you put it, was my favorite part. Everything is vividly described, and that makes it easy to picture the scene. Bravo. In the first stanza, you have a couple of words (opens and lets, to be specific) where the tense should be changed. They should be "open" and "let." But other than that, great work. I especially enjoyed the second stanza as a whole and "rust on the radiator ribs" for the great image and fantastic alliteration. Keep writing! :)

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