for A Day in the Life1/28/2008 c2 
829Anaare
First of all, many thanks for the reviews and giving me a place on your favorite authors list. Greatly appreciated.
I very much enjoyed reading this song. I wish I could actually hear it one day. The imagery is keen and compelling ("echoes in the semblance of tomorrow") and the whole piece has a wonderful rhythm to it. Oh, I think the newer version is better. The format makes the thing flow much better. Excellent work!
829AnaareFirst of all, many thanks for the reviews and giving me a place on your favorite authors list. Greatly appreciated.
I very much enjoyed reading this song. I wish I could actually hear it one day. The imagery is keen and compelling ("echoes in the semblance of tomorrow") and the whole piece has a wonderful rhythm to it. Oh, I think the newer version is better. The format makes the thing flow much better. Excellent work!
12/28/2006 c1 The Reverse Edge Blade
I sure wish I could hear it with melody.
It was a little hard to understand fully, but I could tell it had a deep meaning, though I wasn't sure what it was.
I liked the rythm of the poem, even though it hardly had rhymes.
Keep at it, and write more!
The Reverse Edge Blade
I sure wish I could hear it with melody.
It was a little hard to understand fully, but I could tell it had a deep meaning, though I wasn't sure what it was.
I liked the rythm of the poem, even though it hardly had rhymes.
Keep at it, and write more!
The Reverse Edge Blade
11/21/2006 c1 56hellbentheretic
Not particulary sure if this works. I've read a few songs that people have put on this site and I never think it works the way it should. Now, I'm sure this sounds great when you're playing it, but it is very jaunty and start-stoppy (?) in its delivery here. I would attempt to put more life into it by changing the format drastically. The subject is great, but b/c there is not enough punctuation to tell me when to pause I feel like I'm watching it from a far instead of experiencing it up close.
hellbentheretic
56hellbenthereticNot particulary sure if this works. I've read a few songs that people have put on this site and I never think it works the way it should. Now, I'm sure this sounds great when you're playing it, but it is very jaunty and start-stoppy (?) in its delivery here. I would attempt to put more life into it by changing the format drastically. The subject is great, but b/c there is not enough punctuation to tell me when to pause I feel like I'm watching it from a far instead of experiencing it up close.
hellbentheretic