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11/12/2008 c1 half-sketched.staccatos
konban wa

I always loved how haikus say so much in so little space. *chuckles* That last line was my favorite because it evoked so much emotion - so many memories - from me. "A welcome pile" just sent me into a whole wave of deja vu. Memories of jumping into a "welcoming" pile of leaves, burrowing in it like a home. Then, on a more nostalgic note, jumping in them again as an older child and realizing it no longer help the enticing feelings it used to because I had begun to see it as dirty leaves, sharp sticks, and dirt as opposed to a pile of leaves MEANT for children. *smiles* Lovely bit of poetry here. Kudos.

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2/28/2007 c1 75Azrael Adamine Gaunt
A very happy piece, I liked it. It was simple, yet pretty.
1/6/2007 c1 15greenGalilee
Simple and pretty imagery captures a moment and a season. Rather beautiful haiku.
12/25/2006 c1 Counting Petals
Nice job. I always love how poets can take the simplest things and turn them into something special.
11/27/2006 c1 3Michael Corry
I love your poems - and I was doing just that this morning.
11/26/2006 c1 7Atheneon
A welcome pile indeed. I love Autumn. A very cheerful piece. Very good.
11/25/2006 c1 216ygg
This reminds me of the old Haiku masters. The simplicity is breathtaking in its elegance and richness. Whether or not it was intentional, there's such a wisdom, such a deeply spiritual connotation to be found between the lines.. and yet (which is the real genius part), it's not revealed at all. Instead, this poem manages to create a feeling which, so far, I've only discovered in the works of Dogen, Basho, and other great Zen writers. I guess much of its internal power comes from the word "welcome".. In any case, this is a truly marvelous Haiku of a quality I haven't yet much seen here at FP. Definitely a favorite!
11/23/2006 c1 bipedalcooney
Beautifully done, I like this. Keep writing.

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