for I miss Daddy2/15/2008 c1 
4l337 r0cX3r
This is so sad. I actually started to tear up while I was reading it. I like the way you wrote it from the child's point of view, and actually wrote it like they would talk. It really drives home the point. Keep it up.
4l337 r0cX3rThis is so sad. I actually started to tear up while I was reading it. I like the way you wrote it from the child's point of view, and actually wrote it like they would talk. It really drives home the point. Keep it up.
1/29/2008 c1 65perhaps then you'd notice me
that was really powerful. the innocence of the child had a really good effect, and the emotions were conveyed really well. :D
65perhaps then you'd notice methat was really powerful. the innocence of the child had a really good effect, and the emotions were conveyed really well. :D
12/26/2007 c1 2liraelthegreen
A very touching story. The only problem is that the child's dialogue is not always consistent.
2liraelthegreenA very touching story. The only problem is that the child's dialogue is not always consistent.
10/3/2007 c1 20Twilight Starr
Such a sad, but brilliant, little story.
Good luck with writing, this story, and life.
Have a wonderful day. :)
~Twilight Starr~
20Twilight StarrSuch a sad, but brilliant, little story.
Good luck with writing, this story, and life.
Have a wonderful day. :)
~Twilight Starr~
9/3/2007 c1 4MidnyghtVampyrezz
Whoa. I started crying...oh my gosh, that was so sad...(seriously, i am blinking back tears) That was very, very good. You did the pov of a child excellently.
~SeA~
4MidnyghtVampyrezzWhoa. I started crying...oh my gosh, that was so sad...(seriously, i am blinking back tears) That was very, very good. You did the pov of a child excellently.
~SeA~
1/22/2007 c1 10Richina-Strife
I love the way you were able to get into the childs mind like that. Bravo!
~Richina
10Richina-StrifeI love the way you were able to get into the childs mind like that. Bravo!
~Richina
1/5/2007 c1 15Sahara Hayden
Very very sad... the girl most be very litle, by the way she speaks. Awesome job.
15Sahara HaydenVery very sad... the girl most be very litle, by the way she speaks. Awesome job.