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11/27/2006 c1 63lackluster
this is perfect. the imagery is dead-on amazing and the sarcasm is just too brilliant.
11/26/2006 c1 11primal injection
fun and a little sick. what a juicey combination.
11/26/2006 c1 16Theory Of The 4th Dimension
Ha! This was fun read and the imagery is pungently attractive. Personally, I think this would make a better song than just plain poetry, but that's for you to decide.

"Smear that red lipstick

and cocaine

all over his face again."

...the first few lines had a good momentum going, but I felt you could have had a better and slicker follow-up.

Keep writing!
11/26/2006 c1 40whatsLefTof.me
Straight to the point. Nicely written, RoK oN!

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