for The Girl for Me5/16/2010 c17 
1reeby10
Oh gosh, I just absolutely love this story! You're characters are amazing. I could really relate to both Dani and Kevin and I thought they were both pretty kick ass :D The plot never ceased to put me on the edge of my seat, waiting to see what would happen next. I'm so glad they got a happy ending too!
1reeby10Oh gosh, I just absolutely love this story! You're characters are amazing. I could really relate to both Dani and Kevin and I thought they were both pretty kick ass :D The plot never ceased to put me on the edge of my seat, waiting to see what would happen next. I'm so glad they got a happy ending too!
5/16/2010 c17 Rose
I don't think I could really give you a "well rounded critique". I just wanted to say, I read your story all in one go and had a grin on my face for practically the whole thing. Thank you so much for writing it.
I don't think I could really give you a "well rounded critique". I just wanted to say, I read your story all in one go and had a grin on my face for practically the whole thing. Thank you so much for writing it.
5/9/2010 c17 3BeardedLad
I usually don't review for stories but yours is quite an exception. I absolutely ADORE this story, and your characters. I love Kevin and Dani so much! They are quite simply awesome.
3BeardedLadI usually don't review for stories but yours is quite an exception. I absolutely ADORE this story, and your characters. I love Kevin and Dani so much! They are quite simply awesome.
4/25/2010 c17 PanickedSerenity
I love the epilouge! Amazing story. twistedhilarity had it on her rec list on her website. Thanks for writing a wicked good read.
I love the epilouge! Amazing story. twistedhilarity had it on her rec list on her website. Thanks for writing a wicked good read.
4/18/2010 c17 Rei
Brilliant! I found this story via a recommendation and I wasn't sure what to expect but you handled the topic brilliantly... the characters were very honest and real. I love that a few chapters before the end I found myself thinking back to the characters in the first chapters and thinking 'wow, when did they change so much?'; the progression was so natural I barely noticed it. Also some of your thoughts on the subject of gender, identity, and being who you are that came out through the story... wonderfully insightful. Best of all after finishing it I'm left feeling uplifted. Thank you!
Brilliant! I found this story via a recommendation and I wasn't sure what to expect but you handled the topic brilliantly... the characters were very honest and real. I love that a few chapters before the end I found myself thinking back to the characters in the first chapters and thinking 'wow, when did they change so much?'; the progression was so natural I barely noticed it. Also some of your thoughts on the subject of gender, identity, and being who you are that came out through the story... wonderfully insightful. Best of all after finishing it I'm left feeling uplifted. Thank you!
4/13/2010 c17 David Mora
Hola! I would just like to say this was by far my absolute favorite story on this site! Truly amazing! I think i could read it about 100 times! lol You are the bestest!
Hola! I would just like to say this was by far my absolute favorite story on this site! Truly amazing! I think i could read it about 100 times! lol You are the bestest!
4/3/2010 c17 arikatafreakhotmail.com
What a beautiful story. I'm so happy to have found it.
What a beautiful story. I'm so happy to have found it.
3/24/2010 c17 daemonkieran
love love love
this is coming from an occasional(but very convincing nonetheless)
tranny
you hit so many keypoints
and they struck true and clear
your writing is awesome
and it shows the wonderful person that you are
(yes i am sucking up)
love love love
this is coming from an occasional(but very convincing nonetheless)
tranny
you hit so many keypoints
and they struck true and clear
your writing is awesome
and it shows the wonderful person that you are
(yes i am sucking up)
3/21/2010 c17 Run
Nice,though kinda funny
Nice,though kinda funny
3/16/2010 c17 Treign
Yaay i loved it! Wonderful work :)
Yaay i loved it! Wonderful work :)
3/15/2010 c17 miss-reads-alot
Hey, loved your story. I tried reading it a few years back or somethin' but I wasn't into it, but then I read it and it's like OH MY GAWD! I love Danny oops Dani and Kevin. SO CYOTE!lol
Keep on typing
miss-reads-alot
Hey, loved your story. I tried reading it a few years back or somethin' but I wasn't into it, but then I read it and it's like OH MY GAWD! I love Danny oops Dani and Kevin. SO CYOTE!lol
Keep on typing
miss-reads-alot
3/10/2010 c17 Dark Lynnette
Very cool story. Had me hooked from the start. I've never read a fictional story that dealt with real issues TGs have when discovering if they are in fact TG. Well played and written.
Very cool story. Had me hooked from the start. I've never read a fictional story that dealt with real issues TGs have when discovering if they are in fact TG. Well played and written.
2/13/2010 c17 4teea
Okay, I read the whole story in pretty much one go :) I liked how you handled a rather difficult subject here. Danny's feelings seemed really beliavable and real. I can imagine a person like him/her would go through emotions like this. So, I have to say well done for that. You looked into the matter from different angles, very good! I'm impressed. All the angst Danny felt and conflict of feelings really shone through.
I liked how Kevin seemed real as well. He wasn't perfect, but he tried his best to understand. I was wondering what actually changed his mind, what made him decide he wanted be with Danny? As for other charachters, Danny's mum seemed a little too much like a teenage girl, no offence. It also felt a little weird that Kevin's uncle would be that interested in Kevin's personal life, with all the personal questions.
Your writing itself is good overall. I would maybe use less 'fucks'. I understand that it's your style, but I think you could express the same without that many swear words. After a while, when you use them so much, they they lose their effect. Not everything has to be 'why the fuck', 'what the fuck' and 'oh fuck'. You know what I mean? Also, often a simple full stop is better than '...'. It would make the text look neater and more polished. Maybe work on your sentence structure too, to make it a little more reader-friendly.
That being said, I really liked the idea of this story! Very ispiring. I only hope more people would be as brave as Dani and Kevin.
4teeaOkay, I read the whole story in pretty much one go :) I liked how you handled a rather difficult subject here. Danny's feelings seemed really beliavable and real. I can imagine a person like him/her would go through emotions like this. So, I have to say well done for that. You looked into the matter from different angles, very good! I'm impressed. All the angst Danny felt and conflict of feelings really shone through.
I liked how Kevin seemed real as well. He wasn't perfect, but he tried his best to understand. I was wondering what actually changed his mind, what made him decide he wanted be with Danny? As for other charachters, Danny's mum seemed a little too much like a teenage girl, no offence. It also felt a little weird that Kevin's uncle would be that interested in Kevin's personal life, with all the personal questions.
Your writing itself is good overall. I would maybe use less 'fucks'. I understand that it's your style, but I think you could express the same without that many swear words. After a while, when you use them so much, they they lose their effect. Not everything has to be 'why the fuck', 'what the fuck' and 'oh fuck'. You know what I mean? Also, often a simple full stop is better than '...'. It would make the text look neater and more polished. Maybe work on your sentence structure too, to make it a little more reader-friendly.
That being said, I really liked the idea of this story! Very ispiring. I only hope more people would be as brave as Dani and Kevin.
1/15/2010 c17 3SpiritNights
I liked this :) idk how to explain it.. but overall- it was really really good. thanks :) x x
3SpiritNightsI liked this :) idk how to explain it.. but overall- it was really really good. thanks :) x x