for The Puppet Man3/22/2009 c2 
10TheMonomaniacalGoblin
Bwahahah! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this chapter. Great descriptors and fillers, too. I found the flow was done really well, and I couldn't stop laughing :D Drew me in from the first line - sardonic, yet humourous.
I really like the interesting point of view in your writing; it shifts between present tense and future.. It actually flowed really well with the protagonist's thoughts.
The idea of is certainly entertaining, and I really look forward to seeing this updated. I'll get on to the next chapter ^_^
Loved the amount of satire in this. :)
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10TheMonomaniacalGoblinBwahahah! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this chapter. Great descriptors and fillers, too. I found the flow was done really well, and I couldn't stop laughing :D Drew me in from the first line - sardonic, yet humourous.
I really like the interesting point of view in your writing; it shifts between present tense and future.. It actually flowed really well with the protagonist's thoughts.
The idea of is certainly entertaining, and I really look forward to seeing this updated. I'll get on to the next chapter ^_^
Loved the amount of satire in this. :)
(Review brought to you by The Promised Land Forum- link in profile!)
We'd love it if you were able to drop by and chat sometime. ^_^
2/19/2007 c3 6lux in tenebris
Man, my heart really breaks for this little girl, Alice. I'd really like to know her full story, but I guess that's coming up, isn't it?
Oh, well, I guess I'm going to HAVE to praise your wonderful descriptions and writing stile yet again, aren't I? Considering I can't seem to find anything to complain about. Your grammar skills are awesome. Keep it up!
6lux in tenebrisMan, my heart really breaks for this little girl, Alice. I'd really like to know her full story, but I guess that's coming up, isn't it?
Oh, well, I guess I'm going to HAVE to praise your wonderful descriptions and writing stile yet again, aren't I? Considering I can't seem to find anything to complain about. Your grammar skills are awesome. Keep it up!
2/19/2007 c2 lux in tenebris
Wow! I can't believe I'm the first to review THIS story! I'll consider it an honer. =) Anyway, I love the way you write. I didn't find a single punctuation or grammar or spelling error, and I absolutely can't stand those. I love the way your character, Noah, has an inner battle with what his parents are saying, it gives him personality. And the descriptions! I can actually see what the characters and their surroundings look like! You don't really get that on Fictionpress a lot, honestly. Keep writing! I'm very excited about this piece!
Wow! I can't believe I'm the first to review THIS story! I'll consider it an honer. =) Anyway, I love the way you write. I didn't find a single punctuation or grammar or spelling error, and I absolutely can't stand those. I love the way your character, Noah, has an inner battle with what his parents are saying, it gives him personality. And the descriptions! I can actually see what the characters and their surroundings look like! You don't really get that on Fictionpress a lot, honestly. Keep writing! I'm very excited about this piece!