for Death in the Desert
1112/2/2006 c1 Counting Petals
"Dry, and cracked, bleeding so that the blood stains his teeth."
You might want to clarify what exactly is bleeding here. I assumed that it was his lips, but still.
"He dies alone with the birth of the day."
Ah, loved this!
Very well-written, keep it up!
"Dry, and cracked, bleeding so that the blood stains his teeth."
You might want to clarify what exactly is bleeding here. I assumed that it was his lips, but still.
"He dies alone with the birth of the day."
Ah, loved this!
Very well-written, keep it up!