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1/8/2007 c1 2sicklysnowwhite
sigh. a man in love. ahah, this seems a lot like even if i love her. i like that shes more "flowing" after shes talked to him. its like he... helped her, you know? Depiction... eh. it was okay.
12/21/2006 c1 HB667755
Awesome. I love your style. You write beautifully.
12/9/2006 c1 1capriciousguy
i know a girl just like that. actually, your poem seems to come from my point of view exactly. creepy. i love how you do the distracted daydreaming dancing in the beginning and the end. and how they all start with D thats called something... i dont remember. its great that you let the reader know certain characteristics of the girl, like that she has a sence of humor, however shocking it may be. when i read 'no hablo ingles' i thought that maybe they'd never spoken with each other and he didn't really know if she spoke english or not. it was... surprizing. beautiful poem. i'll read more, you write more.
12/5/2006 c1 The Intelligent Designer
I really like this! I love the circular ending thingy whatever. How the end is the beginning...cool, and I want to know more about the situation...

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