for She Wants to be Free12/12/2006 c1 
73Jezsh
Flows nicely. Penultimate line I wouldn't end with a fullstop, I'd use a dash instead. I would however use a fullstop at the end of the first line. It has a nice rhythm :)
73JezshFlows nicely. Penultimate line I wouldn't end with a fullstop, I'd use a dash instead. I would however use a fullstop at the end of the first line. It has a nice rhythm :)
12/12/2006 c1 Ajna
This has to be the best poem I've read all day, or maybe all week. I like the twist of "she was pushed" at the end, it's so tragic and sad... I love it.
This has to be the best poem I've read all day, or maybe all week. I like the twist of "she was pushed" at the end, it's so tragic and sad... I love it.