
11/26/2008 c3
5Camelia Sinensis
perfect.
the first part was the best. but i also liked the note he left her.

perfect.
the first part was the best. but i also liked the note he left her.
1/29/2007 c3
91fairytale failure
Wow, there are some great thoughts in that poem. Especially the first chapter, but I think you could have condensed it a bit...anyway, how it is, it has great flow.

Wow, there are some great thoughts in that poem. Especially the first chapter, but I think you could have condensed it a bit...anyway, how it is, it has great flow.
12/17/2006 c1 Aquafied
i am not one for love poetry anymore
it is exhausting
this makes me think of a child's tale
i am not one for love poetry anymore
it is exhausting
this makes me think of a child's tale
12/15/2006 c3
19lastchance02
I can't get over how empty I feel after reading this last part. Great piece.

I can't get over how empty I feel after reading this last part. Great piece.
12/15/2006 c3
88multiples of six
This was.. perfection; I don't know what else to say. I think the first chapter was my favourite. It could've stood alone really. But this.. as a whole.. wow.

This was.. perfection; I don't know what else to say. I think the first chapter was my favourite. It could've stood alone really. But this.. as a whole.. wow.
12/14/2006 c3
83Prevaricate
not only is the writing itself entrancing, the story line is relatable.
gorgeous, but with that hint of pain that makes it so real.

not only is the writing itself entrancing, the story line is relatable.
gorgeous, but with that hint of pain that makes it so real.
12/14/2006 c2 a lonely september
i love the way you wrote this. shit ilove it. 'and it was perfection / you were sugar smiles and twinkling eyes' 'you called me your china doll, but you never acted like you thought i was going to break' it doesnt get any more perfect than that. those lines are perfection. this poem is perfection. i love it.
i love the way you wrote this. shit ilove it. 'and it was perfection / you were sugar smiles and twinkling eyes' 'you called me your china doll, but you never acted like you thought i was going to break' it doesnt get any more perfect than that. those lines are perfection. this poem is perfection. i love it.
12/14/2006 c1 a lonely september
this is awesome. i know this feeilng. when it's only for a night, only for a little while... and yet you cant let go.
this is awesome. i know this feeilng. when it's only for a night, only for a little while... and yet you cant let go.