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for let's pretend this was heartbreak

11/26/2008 c3 5Camelia Sinensis
perfect.

the first part was the best. but i also liked the note he left her.
5/29/2007 c1 13hicetnunc
i really like the mood in this one :) good work
1/29/2007 c3 91fairytale failure
Wow, there are some great thoughts in that poem. Especially the first chapter, but I think you could have condensed it a bit...anyway, how it is, it has great flow.
12/17/2006 c3 65Aquafied
ah, well

that is a pleasant end rather.
12/17/2006 c2 Aquafied
reading this makes me think it is all going to end in heartbreak and dispair
12/17/2006 c1 Aquafied
i am not one for love poetry anymore

it is exhausting

this makes me think of a child's tale
12/15/2006 c3 19lastchance02
I can't get over how empty I feel after reading this last part. Great piece.
12/15/2006 c3 88multiples of six
This was.. perfection; I don't know what else to say. I think the first chapter was my favourite. It could've stood alone really. But this.. as a whole.. wow.
12/14/2006 c3 83Prevaricate
not only is the writing itself entrancing, the story line is relatable.

gorgeous, but with that hint of pain that makes it so real.
12/14/2006 c2 a lonely september
i love the way you wrote this. shit ilove it. 'and it was perfection / you were sugar smiles and twinkling eyes' 'you called me your china doll, but you never acted like you thought i was going to break' it doesnt get any more perfect than that. those lines are perfection. this poem is perfection. i love it.
12/14/2006 c1 a lonely september
this is awesome. i know this feeilng. when it's only for a night, only for a little while... and yet you cant let go.

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