for raw1/16/2007 c1 
144chaos called creation
I could actually see this. The contrast was amazing, and the ending was so sweet.
144chaos called creationI could actually see this. The contrast was amazing, and the ending was so sweet.
1/10/2007 c1 63lackluster
the imagery and lingering thoughts are really great. the ending line in particular has a nice effect. short and sweet yet it has a nice 'punch' to it, kinda makes me wonder what else you have to say. i guess in a way it feels unfinished, but it's the lovely kind of unfinished that you can live with.
63lacklusterthe imagery and lingering thoughts are really great. the ending line in particular has a nice effect. short and sweet yet it has a nice 'punch' to it, kinda makes me wonder what else you have to say. i guess in a way it feels unfinished, but it's the lovely kind of unfinished that you can live with.