12/31/2006 c1 52Aelux
You have a very interesting style, I like it. It's hard to tell if you're just creating a moment or that those are your thoughts/feelings of a certain time/place. More more. I found the last stanza to parallel nicely with certain attributes to how people are/become - if that was your intention or not.
You have a very interesting style, I like it. It's hard to tell if you're just creating a moment or that those are your thoughts/feelings of a certain time/place. More more. I found the last stanza to parallel nicely with certain attributes to how people are/become - if that was your intention or not.
12/20/2006 c1 17sporkofdoom
"We swore one day we’d leave this/silly little city and/forget the songs we used to love."
Wow. This is lovely. The ending, especially.
"We swore one day we’d leave this/silly little city and/forget the songs we used to love."
Wow. This is lovely. The ending, especially.