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2/16/2007 c1 16Melos Atriensis
Oh, I like! The 'irony' line is very cool, and the ending line was very necessary for the poem. It's short, but they don't really have to be long. I'm not sure I like the '&' bits, though... I guess that's personal.

But yes, I quite like this piece. I really like how you've used the piano, and that 'irony' line fits perfectly!

Keep writing

1/16/2007 c1 144chaos called creation
Definitely not what I expected, but I really liked the irony line and the fact that you mentioned the piano, haha. The poem itself makes me think of a slow crescendo.

I agree with your summary.
12/24/2006 c1 34Protege
hey there!

the words on this flow quite nicely, but it suffers. A cliche: ebony and ivory. avoid cliches, they show little creativity unless you warp them. then there's the softness of this: racing, and then calming... it's not very dramatic. it seems like a tiny minor thing, when I don't think that's what you're getting at.

don't think I don't like it. it just needs to be kicked up a notch.


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