for lifetime2/2/2007 c1 
80magnusthewolf
i actually liked this piece...again, raw emotion like this can be moving :)
80magnusthewolfi actually liked this piece...again, raw emotion like this can be moving :)
2/2/2007 c1 64realityescapesher
stunning. i'm sorry it's taken me so long to review you back, i haven't been on this website much lately. your poetry is gorgeous. i love the entire second stanza, specifically "dragging your dedication down my cheeks" what an amazingly powerful line. also "and breathing in" made the breath catch in my throat. i really like how dark this feels. some writers can write really pretty words that sound nice, but not everyone can put that intense feeling behind it. this deserves applause. or snapping if that's what you're in to.
i'll most definitely be back to read more. :]
-aly
64realityescapesherstunning. i'm sorry it's taken me so long to review you back, i haven't been on this website much lately. your poetry is gorgeous. i love the entire second stanza, specifically "dragging your dedication down my cheeks" what an amazingly powerful line. also "and breathing in" made the breath catch in my throat. i really like how dark this feels. some writers can write really pretty words that sound nice, but not everyone can put that intense feeling behind it. this deserves applause. or snapping if that's what you're in to.
i'll most definitely be back to read more. :]
-aly
1/23/2007 c1 11Chemically Induced
this is a very original peom; no one ever verse-spins about the perilous lifestyle of acting. its romantic, but ultimately broken-hearted, and it radiates with all the sad beauty of a worn sacrificial love. i especially liked, "as you pull me sideways;" that phrase is pretty as hell all by itself. sometimes, i read it and think, so is he acting? is she acting? are they not acting? can they even tell anymore? so i was confused, but its okay, because whomever reads this can be confused and still enjoy it. i did. maybe that was your point. very nicely done. :)
thanks for your review; i think you made me blush...;p
love, c.induced.
11Chemically Inducedthis is a very original peom; no one ever verse-spins about the perilous lifestyle of acting. its romantic, but ultimately broken-hearted, and it radiates with all the sad beauty of a worn sacrificial love. i especially liked, "as you pull me sideways;" that phrase is pretty as hell all by itself. sometimes, i read it and think, so is he acting? is she acting? are they not acting? can they even tell anymore? so i was confused, but its okay, because whomever reads this can be confused and still enjoy it. i did. maybe that was your point. very nicely done. :)
thanks for your review; i think you made me blush...;p
love, c.induced.
1/23/2007 c1 10TrunkZy
Poorly done? You're mad, darling.
"& you claim your business to be secrets, leaving me to
wonder what mine is.
i, who have spent a lifetime running, and performing" That's such a gorgeous line.
Inspirational source = The Prestige. ?
Passion and hatred. I just love the two combined. The first line was amazing beyond words.
10TrunkZyPoorly done? You're mad, darling.
"& you claim your business to be secrets, leaving me to
wonder what mine is.
i, who have spent a lifetime running, and performing" That's such a gorgeous line.
Inspirational source = The Prestige. ?
Passion and hatred. I just love the two combined. The first line was amazing beyond words.
12/26/2006 c1 123dress her up in fairytales
the opening stanza blew me away. and everythign follows up so well.
"you shove opinions down my throat"
i feel as if people do that to me every day.
123dress her up in fairytalesthe opening stanza blew me away. and everythign follows up so well.
"you shove opinions down my throat"
i feel as if people do that to me every day.
12/26/2006 c1 Crossing the Rubicon
I don't think this is poorly down at all. The phrases in this ("your art tumbles from your lips"; "& so you spit your sacrifices in my face / dragging your dedication down my cheeks"; "whispering your illusions against my skin
and breathing in") make a strong impression. In my opinion, poetry should leave a strong impression, and that's what you've done with this piece.
I don't think this is poorly down at all. The phrases in this ("your art tumbles from your lips"; "& so you spit your sacrifices in my face / dragging your dedication down my cheeks"; "whispering your illusions against my skin
and breathing in") make a strong impression. In my opinion, poetry should leave a strong impression, and that's what you've done with this piece.
12/26/2006 c1 95Ellin Louise
I don't really think it is poorly done, but it's hard to read it with an open mind when youa are told it is poorly done... but yes, it is an interesting topic, but I would probably take out the & signs and the comment... and if you're not happy maybe work on it. but it is not a bad poem...
95Ellin LouiseI don't really think it is poorly done, but it's hard to read it with an open mind when youa are told it is poorly done... but yes, it is an interesting topic, but I would probably take out the & signs and the comment... and if you're not happy maybe work on it. but it is not a bad poem...