
1/18/2007 c1
22Lucid Nonsense
Very nice. The passing of time is truly frightening sometimes. The last stanza is powerful.

Very nice. The passing of time is truly frightening sometimes. The last stanza is powerful.
1/6/2007 c1
871no.peace.los.angeles
Wow, the second stanza of this is just pure art. "photographs stifle" has to be one of the best phrases I've heard in a long time. That is just too amazing. I do find the second stanza a lot stronger than the first, almost too much so, so it's as if they belong to different poems. Do you see what I'm saying? In any case, some wonderful writing. Keep writing! :)

Wow, the second stanza of this is just pure art. "photographs stifle" has to be one of the best phrases I've heard in a long time. That is just too amazing. I do find the second stanza a lot stronger than the first, almost too much so, so it's as if they belong to different poems. Do you see what I'm saying? In any case, some wonderful writing. Keep writing! :)
1/1/2007 c1
301sirius chatham
ya know, i like this. it's simple, it's eloquent, and it captures the mood very well. nicely done!
cheers,
sirius chatham,
ps r/r my work too

ya know, i like this. it's simple, it's eloquent, and it captures the mood very well. nicely done!
cheers,
sirius chatham,
ps r/r my work too
1/1/2007 c1
1thestonedfox
New Years are so overrated, but your poem said it better than I ever could.
The line "but we laugh, and finger the tablecloth nervously," was so nicely worded. Great job.

New Years are so overrated, but your poem said it better than I ever could.
The line "but we laugh, and finger the tablecloth nervously," was so nicely worded. Great job.