for Kindgom Come1/5/2007 c1 
9Eyetk
Oo. So, short, but there is nothing wrong with having a very short prologue...except that it's taking me a while to write this review because I was outside and my hands froze, and now I'm inside and they're thawing, making them feel weird.
...I had a point to this. Ah, yes. The -reason- that I was outside, having my hands frozen, was because I printed this off and was reviewing it on paper. When I do that, I make two columns: 'pos' for things I liked, and 'neg' for things I thought could be better. Then I try to put down at least two points for each column; when I go back inside, these points are translated into a review.
But, alas and alack, it was extremely difficult to find even one 'neg' and this 'neg' was very nit-picky. Thus, this elaborate tale of mine becomes a rather obscure (but very high) compliment.
T'was a powerful introduction; the Lord's Prayer (I believe that is the name...I'm not a Christian) was well interspersed, and the tension was kept high throughout. The introduction of heavenly/demonic forces was smooth, and overall I very much liked this. The one negative I was going to nitpick about would be Mr. Andrews' praying: it says that he prays for his wife's life, but then that he 'whispers the only prayer he knows'. These two sentences seemed a bit contradictory.
Er...yes. I shall now go make myself a hot drink, I believe. Cheers, and good luck with your writing!
9EyetkOo. So, short, but there is nothing wrong with having a very short prologue...except that it's taking me a while to write this review because I was outside and my hands froze, and now I'm inside and they're thawing, making them feel weird.
...I had a point to this. Ah, yes. The -reason- that I was outside, having my hands frozen, was because I printed this off and was reviewing it on paper. When I do that, I make two columns: 'pos' for things I liked, and 'neg' for things I thought could be better. Then I try to put down at least two points for each column; when I go back inside, these points are translated into a review.
But, alas and alack, it was extremely difficult to find even one 'neg' and this 'neg' was very nit-picky. Thus, this elaborate tale of mine becomes a rather obscure (but very high) compliment.
T'was a powerful introduction; the Lord's Prayer (I believe that is the name...I'm not a Christian) was well interspersed, and the tension was kept high throughout. The introduction of heavenly/demonic forces was smooth, and overall I very much liked this. The one negative I was going to nitpick about would be Mr. Andrews' praying: it says that he prays for his wife's life, but then that he 'whispers the only prayer he knows'. These two sentences seemed a bit contradictory.
Er...yes. I shall now go make myself a hot drink, I believe. Cheers, and good luck with your writing!