for A Bit of Paper2/18/2007 c1 she smolders
I know how hard it is to forget about the past but maybe it's okay to remember it as long as we don't it consume all of our time. I like the wistful feelings in this piece.
I know how hard it is to forget about the past but maybe it's okay to remember it as long as we don't it consume all of our time. I like the wistful feelings in this piece.
1/7/2007 c1 
73ten pts above average
wow...I love it! the last two lines are amazing!
ps-thx so much for all the reviews! I hope you read more! =]
73ten pts above averagewow...I love it! the last two lines are amazing!
ps-thx so much for all the reviews! I hope you read more! =]
1/6/2007 c1 20The Wandering Musician
Nice poem! The rhymes were very natural, which is always important when one is writing poetry. The last line of the first stanza ("as the mists float from the shore") felt like it had a few too many syllables, but other than that it was a great poem. Keep writing!
~Rain of Joy
20The Wandering MusicianNice poem! The rhymes were very natural, which is always important when one is writing poetry. The last line of the first stanza ("as the mists float from the shore") felt like it had a few too many syllables, but other than that it was a great poem. Keep writing!
~Rain of Joy