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5/9/2007 c1 20SAKoi
Very whispery. I thought it read kind of choppily, but the images are good.
1/25/2007 c1 32eldrin
I'm quite impressed once again with your use of repetition: it's deliberate and elegant. This is lovely work.

Is 'their arm' meant to be 'their arms?' I only ask because while it appears to be a typo I can also see it as an interesting singular/unifying effect. If it is an effect, it's interesting, even if a little grating, and if not, well, then it flows naturally.

Again, lovely work. I've seen enough to convince me to return to you in the (hopefully near) future.
1/8/2007 c1 87R.J. Crosbie
Oh wonderful! It makes me feel like I'm 5 years old. Sometimes I ran through scenes, hoping to find a dark, quiet corner. It's like the beach at night, with little candle-lit houses. Very beautiful.

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