for Passing1/25/2007 c1 
32eldrin
I'm quite impressed once again with your use of repetition: it's deliberate and elegant. This is lovely work.
Is 'their arm' meant to be 'their arms?' I only ask because while it appears to be a typo I can also see it as an interesting singular/unifying effect. If it is an effect, it's interesting, even if a little grating, and if not, well, then it flows naturally.
Again, lovely work. I've seen enough to convince me to return to you in the (hopefully near) future.
32eldrinI'm quite impressed once again with your use of repetition: it's deliberate and elegant. This is lovely work.
Is 'their arm' meant to be 'their arms?' I only ask because while it appears to be a typo I can also see it as an interesting singular/unifying effect. If it is an effect, it's interesting, even if a little grating, and if not, well, then it flows naturally.
Again, lovely work. I've seen enough to convince me to return to you in the (hopefully near) future.
1/8/2007 c1 87R.J. Crosbie
Oh wonderful! It makes me feel like I'm 5 years old. Sometimes I ran through scenes, hoping to find a dark, quiet corner. It's like the beach at night, with little candle-lit houses. Very beautiful.
87R.J. CrosbieOh wonderful! It makes me feel like I'm 5 years old. Sometimes I ran through scenes, hoping to find a dark, quiet corner. It's like the beach at night, with little candle-lit houses. Very beautiful.