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1/11/2007 c1 22Lucid Nonsense
I actually prefer the slight inconsistancy of meter because it prevents it from being sing-song (which is always an issue with patterned rhyme). The enajambent also made it less sing-songy. In addition, your rhyming is always great, smooth without sounding Mother-goose childish. "Fall like Dido at love's raging summons." Ah, great line with the Aeneid allusion and lovely diction. "The ocean is burning", powerful image.

Good job.

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