for The Wandering Prophet Returns4/10/2007 c1 
189oxytocin
Circuitous, strangely compelling... You link together random ideas and imagery in a completely illogical (or is it logical? I don't know which) way which is incredibly interesting to read. This poem is very roundabout, very random, and full of deeper topics than I think you let out. Very impressive - absolutely intriguing. Good job.
189oxytocinCircuitous, strangely compelling... You link together random ideas and imagery in a completely illogical (or is it logical? I don't know which) way which is incredibly interesting to read. This poem is very roundabout, very random, and full of deeper topics than I think you let out. Very impressive - absolutely intriguing. Good job.
4/5/2007 c1 disabled account
I like this poem, although I must confess that at the end of this poem I still do not have any conclusive thoughts on the interrelatedness of shoes and logic. I was also given a much undesired refresher crash-course in algebra - right before spring break too, damn it :) - that left my head spinning and my eyes quite literally rolling in an effort to assimilate the multiplicity of y's and x's and transitive properties. The biggest hindrance to enjoying this poem (though I also think it adds a bit to its arbitrary whimsy, as well) is its sheer momentum - it starts out beautifully and then rolls down the hill like the oft-quoted proverbial snowball, becomming progressively larger and more complex. I also generally caution against using such abbreviations as " 'round" - perhaps it's just me, but I think it lessens credibility in an author. Good poem overall; I felt particularly elated at the beginning of the poem: "You are here/is a mere speck/ on the map/ and no one really cares/ if you are here or if you are suddenly/Not." I like it when poems express essential truths simply and gorgeously. Nice job. Adieu, Kat
I like this poem, although I must confess that at the end of this poem I still do not have any conclusive thoughts on the interrelatedness of shoes and logic. I was also given a much undesired refresher crash-course in algebra - right before spring break too, damn it :) - that left my head spinning and my eyes quite literally rolling in an effort to assimilate the multiplicity of y's and x's and transitive properties. The biggest hindrance to enjoying this poem (though I also think it adds a bit to its arbitrary whimsy, as well) is its sheer momentum - it starts out beautifully and then rolls down the hill like the oft-quoted proverbial snowball, becomming progressively larger and more complex. I also generally caution against using such abbreviations as " 'round" - perhaps it's just me, but I think it lessens credibility in an author. Good poem overall; I felt particularly elated at the beginning of the poem: "You are here/is a mere speck/ on the map/ and no one really cares/ if you are here or if you are suddenly/Not." I like it when poems express essential truths simply and gorgeously. Nice job. Adieu, Kat
2/8/2007 c1 6Durandel
Woah... that really confused me. Shoes are important... then that mean my brother won't have any problems being noticed. heh heh... well good, nothing much I can say, except that that was vey creative...
6DurandelWoah... that really confused me. Shoes are important... then that mean my brother won't have any problems being noticed. heh heh... well good, nothing much I can say, except that that was vey creative...
2/2/2007 c1 1Spirit Tigress
I'm confused now, but I did like how you used math to relate to logic.
-SB
1Spirit TigressI'm confused now, but I did like how you used math to relate to logic.
-SB
2/1/2007 c1 136Elliptical Shapes
This was very cool Baxter. I loved it. However, I don't understand how life is related to a quadratic equation. That is what you were doing with that y=ax2+bx+c thing isn't it? Its very like annoying maths that my not so mathematical brain is just capable of comprehending.
The first bit where you said I don't exist made me love you even more than the label "Baxter" implies. I now must consider you to be worthy of the title "Baxter squared" or possibly "Baxter cubed". If your mental flux continues along this path, you may attain the level of "Baxter to the power of N!" an achievement scraping the upper echelons of Baxterial possibility.
Yes, one day a mental break is imminent. We love it.
Alan.
136Elliptical ShapesThis was very cool Baxter. I loved it. However, I don't understand how life is related to a quadratic equation. That is what you were doing with that y=ax2+bx+c thing isn't it? Its very like annoying maths that my not so mathematical brain is just capable of comprehending.
The first bit where you said I don't exist made me love you even more than the label "Baxter" implies. I now must consider you to be worthy of the title "Baxter squared" or possibly "Baxter cubed". If your mental flux continues along this path, you may attain the level of "Baxter to the power of N!" an achievement scraping the upper echelons of Baxterial possibility.
Yes, one day a mental break is imminent. We love it.
Alan.
1/23/2007 c1 871no.peace.los.angeles
Alright, I had read this awhile back, but when I tried to review, the reviews weren't working. So now that they are, I feel as though I can properly review. As much as I hate math, I really like the use of it in poetry. Go figure. I think you've done a wonderful job of connecting the two in this poem. The narrator's voice is wonderful, switching back and forth from a detached 3rd person to the all-knowing 1st person. And your logic really is flawless. It's something I've never thought before, and you certainly got my mind working while reading this. Bravo. Keep writing! :)
871no.peace.los.angelesAlright, I had read this awhile back, but when I tried to review, the reviews weren't working. So now that they are, I feel as though I can properly review. As much as I hate math, I really like the use of it in poetry. Go figure. I think you've done a wonderful job of connecting the two in this poem. The narrator's voice is wonderful, switching back and forth from a detached 3rd person to the all-knowing 1st person. And your logic really is flawless. It's something I've never thought before, and you certainly got my mind working while reading this. Bravo. Keep writing! :)
1/16/2007 c1 16brokendreams21
Oh my. Talk about CONFUSING ME. I think somebody has had just a BIT too much math this semester.
The part that really irks me about the (seemingly) rambling (no offence) math stuff is that it WORKS. It actually does make sense.
*sigh* I just love the way that you can make the most ordinary things seem...well, extraordinary. I also like how you manage to connect together things that usually don't have much in common with each other, make it make sense, and make it have some supper-duper secret deep meaning attached to it.
As usual, I love your line breaks and such...and just...everything else about it?
Anyways, back to studying. I'll probably reply to your e-mail this...weekend. When I find the time. Exams are next week...so we'll wee.
Awesome job!
Katherine
16brokendreams21Oh my. Talk about CONFUSING ME. I think somebody has had just a BIT too much math this semester.
The part that really irks me about the (seemingly) rambling (no offence) math stuff is that it WORKS. It actually does make sense.
*sigh* I just love the way that you can make the most ordinary things seem...well, extraordinary. I also like how you manage to connect together things that usually don't have much in common with each other, make it make sense, and make it have some supper-duper secret deep meaning attached to it.
As usual, I love your line breaks and such...and just...everything else about it?
Anyways, back to studying. I'll probably reply to your e-mail this...weekend. When I find the time. Exams are next week...so we'll wee.
Awesome job!
Katherine
1/16/2007 c1 879Moondog Dozier
I like the equational aspects in this. They are used well in the way that logic and logical thought is presented and dispersed. So many thought provoking lines, and sequences of thought in this, it is hard to pick just one so I won't, but the whole thing was a joy to read. It has a scientific-philosophy feel that is unique, and a change from your usual works. Great thought sections. Well written. MD:77.
879Moondog DozierI like the equational aspects in this. They are used well in the way that logic and logical thought is presented and dispersed. So many thought provoking lines, and sequences of thought in this, it is hard to pick just one so I won't, but the whole thing was a joy to read. It has a scientific-philosophy feel that is unique, and a change from your usual works. Great thought sections. Well written. MD:77.
1/11/2007 c1 33WyrdWolf
I don't know what it is about your poetry that makes it so utterly exquisite.
Oh, yeah; you write it.
Seriously, love, this is remarkable. I love how you can just keep connecting the math to the shoes to life in a nonsensical way that just pieces together and DOES, in fact, make sense. Glorious. I especially love the, 'breakdown, repair/breakdown, repair/breakdown, toss/shopping trip' lines.
Interesting side note: I could not help but read this aloud. You know, when the Writer's Guild has a next poetry reading, can I read this? I had so much fun just reading it to myself that I just can't hold it back from others. I'd read it at the next meeting, but I want it to be a surprise. So! With your permission?
Aboslutely adored this, love. Favorite, no qualms. *kiss* Hope to hear from you soon.
Shane
33WyrdWolfI don't know what it is about your poetry that makes it so utterly exquisite.
Oh, yeah; you write it.
Seriously, love, this is remarkable. I love how you can just keep connecting the math to the shoes to life in a nonsensical way that just pieces together and DOES, in fact, make sense. Glorious. I especially love the, 'breakdown, repair/breakdown, repair/breakdown, toss/shopping trip' lines.
Interesting side note: I could not help but read this aloud. You know, when the Writer's Guild has a next poetry reading, can I read this? I had so much fun just reading it to myself that I just can't hold it back from others. I'd read it at the next meeting, but I want it to be a surprise. So! With your permission?
Aboslutely adored this, love. Favorite, no qualms. *kiss* Hope to hear from you soon.
Shane
1/11/2007 c1 57empathic life
It's all so very philosophical, darling. I love it, with its puns and satire and daunting references to algebra. A remarkable job. Definitely an adequate follow-up to your previous Prophet poem. So. Lovely. Yours, truly, Alex PS- I miss your emails, but I'm sticking to my resolution. I shant overreact. I shall simply miss you, and my inbox will be lonely...
57empathic lifeIt's all so very philosophical, darling. I love it, with its puns and satire and daunting references to algebra. A remarkable job. Definitely an adequate follow-up to your previous Prophet poem. So. Lovely. Yours, truly, Alex PS- I miss your emails, but I'm sticking to my resolution. I shant overreact. I shall simply miss you, and my inbox will be lonely...