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2/17/2007 c1 113Travis C. Eckert
Probably about current war problems. Good job. Especially with the weeping willow metaphor.
1/26/2007 c1 Mc
U do reliz e this is why ur getting a D in spanish mel jk lol
1/19/2007 c1 KATIE
PICK UP YOUR PHONE btw GREAT POEM! now pick up da phone!
1/12/2007 c1 138simply meg
I liked this. There are a few things I would change, however.

In the line that goes "A little longer, just a little" I would add another "longer". So that it would be "A little longer, just a little longer." and "Pollutions" should simply be "Pollution". as well, "never-ending war" sounds better than "all war." And last but not least, "The weeping willow swaying in the breeze" doesn't make sense. Shouldn't it be "as the weeping is swaying in the breeze" or "The weeping willow sways in the breeze"?

Note: I'm not telling you what to write, these are simply suggestions. If you think that this poem is perfect the way it is, don't change a thing. I'm not trying to insult you in any way.

This is an amazing poem, none-the-less.
1/12/2007 c1 81Princess-anna57
It's so very sad, isn't it. :( Thanks for sharing, and keep writing. You have a gift for making the reader feel so much. :)

~Anna~ ^_^

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