for spite1/12/2007 c1 
102Midnight In Eden
I'd recommend perhaps instead of ellipses to just use periods instead. Also ellipses have three dots, no more, no less.
I quite like it's short and bitter tone but I just wonder about the second line in the first stanza and the last two lines in the last stanza. I think there are more original ways in which to describe the anger and the rage, as it is now it's a bit too flat.
Other than that, nice.
.:midnight:.
102Midnight In EdenI'd recommend perhaps instead of ellipses to just use periods instead. Also ellipses have three dots, no more, no less.
I quite like it's short and bitter tone but I just wonder about the second line in the first stanza and the last two lines in the last stanza. I think there are more original ways in which to describe the anger and the rage, as it is now it's a bit too flat.
Other than that, nice.
.:midnight:.