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1/12/2007 c1 102Midnight In Eden
I'd think about putting "my paramour, my pen" on it's own line at the end. Also if you've got that comma in perhaps punctuate it completely? Something like :

Cling to the imaginary,

writing about reality.

Then throwing away

my paramour, my pen.

Just an idea.

Other than that though, short, sweet and to the point. I like.

.:midnight:.

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